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Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 2
Some consider raising fuel prices as the most effective method to resolve global environmental issues. In my opinion, I firmly disagree with this argument as it has the potential to disrupt world recession and global peace severely. To begin with, transportation, industrial production, and even energy generation sectors, run their operations on oil. If the oil prices are increasing, it raises the prices of the products and services of these sectors as well. As a result, this affects the general public’s ability to afford basic products and services which is known as inflation. This does not only affects the households, but also slows down the overall growth of the recession. For instance, in developing countries, it is often observed that whenever the petrol price jumps up, the economic growth jumps down. Moreover, increasing the gas cost not just disturbs the economy, it can promote instability as well. When people are unable to afford the basic necessities, they get frustrated. This often leads to protest and sometimes these protests are converted into violent demonstrations, which not only results in the loss of public property, but also human lives. For example, in recent days, a protest against oil prices increase in Iran spread across the country which compelled the authorities to contain it by force and restricting mobile and internet services in the affected areas. In conclusion, I think that without any alternative options for material, increasing the electricity prices is not the solution to the global environmental issues, but a trigger to affect the world economy and global peace and stability.
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Some
consider raising fuel
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prices
as the most effective method to resolve
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global
environmental issues. In my opinion, I
firmly
disagree with this argument as it has the potential to disrupt world recession and
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global
peace
severely
.

To
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begin
with, transportation, industrial production, and even energy generation sectors, run their operations on oil. If the oil
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prices
are increasing, it raises the
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prices
of the products and services of these sectors
as well
.
As a result
, this affects the
Consider using "public".
general public
’s ability to afford basic products and services which
is known
as inflation. This does not
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only
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affects
the households,
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but
also
slows down the
overall
growth of the recession.
For instance
, in
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developing countries
, it is
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often
observed that whenever the petrol
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price
jumps up, the economic growth jumps down.

Moreover
, increasing the gas cost not
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just
disturbs the economy, it can promote instability
as well
. When
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people
are unable to afford the
Consider using "necessities".
basic necessities
, they
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get
frustrated. This
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often
leads to protest and
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sometimes
these protests
are converted
into violent demonstrations, which not
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only
results in the loss of public property,
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but
also
human
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lives
.
For example
, in recent days, a protest against oil
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prices
increase in Iran spread across the country which compelled the authorities to contain it by force and restricting mobile and internet services in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
areas.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that without any alternative options for material, increasing the electricity
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prices
is not the solution to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
environmental issues,
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but
a trigger to affect the world economy and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
peace and stability.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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