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Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to Increase the cost of fuel. To what extent Do you agree or disagree. v.1

Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to Increase the cost of fuel. v. 1
In several countries, people now prefer living in nuclear families or in single to living in large family units. Personally, I believe that the benefits of living in small families outweigh bigger ones. One of the main benefits of living alone or in small families is the ability to focus one's resources. We now live in an era of globalization, which is characterised by limited resources and busy schedules. When parents have small families, they can manage their homes better by spending quality time with their children and afford a quality education. For example, parents with a family of two children would have a lesser budget than families with five children. Also living alone in my opinion, helps single people to have more privacy. This helps them to become more focused and avoid distractions that members of a big family would bring. By focusing more the can achieve their life goals faster. There are other advantages of living in small family units, especially in the society. Most of our modern cities are overpopulated and embracing smaller homes helps to fix this problem. A family is the smallest unit of a society, therefore nuclear families consisting of five or less people would mean a lesser number of people in the society. For instance, in first world countries like China, the introduction of small family schemes has helped them control their overgrowing population. If population figures are within the normal range for a country, more resources would be available for the people and governments can afford food, employment and shelter for its populace. In conclusion, I believe that living in smaller homes will help people manage their resources better and help societies control overpopulation.
In several countries,
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prefer
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living
in nuclear
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families
or in single to
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living
in large
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family
units.
Personally
, I believe that the benefits of
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living
in
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small
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outweigh bigger ones.

One of the main benefits of
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living
alone or in
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small
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families
is the ability to focus one's resources. We
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now
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live
in an era of globalization, which is
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characterised
by limited resources and busy schedules. When parents have
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small
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families
, they can manage their homes better by spending quality time with their children and afford a quality education.
For example
, parents with a
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family
of two children would have a lesser budget than
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families
with five children.
Also
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living
alone in my opinion,
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helps
single
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people
to have more privacy. This
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helps
them to become more focused and avoid distractions that members of a
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big
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family
would bring. By focusing more the can achieve their life goals faster.

There are other advantages of
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living
in
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small
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family
units,
especially
in the
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society
. Most of our modern cities
are overpopulated
and embracing smaller homes
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helps
to
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fix
this problem. A
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family
is the smallest unit of a
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society
,
therefore
nuclear
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families
consisting of five or
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less
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people
would mean a lesser number of
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people
in the
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society
.
For instance
, in
first
world countries like China, the introduction of
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small
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family
schemes has
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helped
them control their overgrowing population. If population figures are within the normal range for a country, more resources would be available for the
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people
and
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governments
can afford food, employment and shelter for its populace.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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living
in smaller homes will
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help
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people
manage their resources better and
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help
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societies
control overpopulation.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to Increase the cost of fuel. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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