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Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on their planets and messages should be sent to contact them Other scientists think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.2

Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on their planets and messages should be sent to contact them Other scientists think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous 2
Nowadays, chemicals are used extensively in the preparation and the preservation of food. Some people are of the opinion that such preservatives in food have harmful effects on the human body, whereas others believe that packed food is a great option. This essay will discuss both, the merits and the demerits of it with relevant examples. To begin with, the main benefit of use of chemicals amplifies the taste and colour of food. For example, 'Pav bhaji' is a famous street food of India; vendors put red colour to its gravy to make it appear more tempting and mouth watering. Indeed, this technique helps them earn good money without investing much. On the contrary, an over- consumption of chemicals in food can have bad effects on the human body. Many food companies in order to make food delicious tend to lose focus on its nutritional value, leading to the use of carcinogenic compounds and fatty substances. For example, 'Maggi noodles' is a product of Nestle company, was recently found containing lead, which if consumed could lead to cancer. Additionally, packed food contains preservatives, is also the primary reason of obesity in children. Therefore, parents should motivate young children to avoid such kind of snacks. In conclusion, it is evident that although the use of chemicals in food make dishes look interesting, its health hazards should always be considered before the consumption. Thus, a fresh home made is the best choice for a healthy human body and has an upper hand over the packed ones.
Nowadays,
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chemicals
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used
extensively
in the preparation and the preservation of
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food
.
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people
are of the opinion that such preservatives in
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food
have harmful effects on the human body, whereas others believe that packed
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food
is a great option. This essay will discuss both, the merits and the demerits of it with relevant examples.

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chemicals
amplifies the taste and
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colour
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food
.
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, '
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Pav
bhaji' is a
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famous
street
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food
of India; vendors put red
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colour
to its gravy to
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make
it appear more tempting and mouth watering.
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helps
them earn
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good
money without investing much.

On the contrary
, an over- consumption of
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chemicals
in
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food
can have
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bad
effects on the human body.
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food
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companies
in order to
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make
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food
delicious tend to lose focus on its nutritional value, leading to the
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use
of carcinogenic compounds and fatty substances.
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, '
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, was recently found containing lead, which
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if
consumed could lead to cancer.
Additionally
, packed
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food
contains preservatives, is
also
the primary reason of obesity in children.
Therefore
, parents should motivate young children to avoid such kind of snacks.

In conclusion
, it is evident that although the
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use
of
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chemicals
in
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food
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make
dishes look interesting, its health hazards should always
be considered
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before
the consumption.
Thus
, a fresh home made is the best choice for a healthy human body and has an upper hand over the packed ones.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on their planets and messages should be sent to contact them Other scientists think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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