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Some people think that youngsters should get involved in unpaid work, while others oppose as it may affect their career. Discuss both the sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include and relevant examples. v.3

People have different opinions about whether youngsters should get involved in unpaid social work. While some insist that it is beneficial for young people, others argue that it will hurt their career prospects. In my opinion, it certainly makes sense for youngsters to engage in some kind of community work during their free time; however, they should not allow the volunteering to take their focus off their career goals. Young people reap many benefits when they engage in unpaid work for the underprivileged sections of the society. This allows them to see the various aspects of life and when they realize that many people around them do not even have the basic necessities of life, they will learn to count their blessings. In addition, volunteering is a great opportunity to acquire valuable work experience. They can mention these stints in their resume when it is time to apply for a job. Youngsters who have done some kind of community work are more likely to get hired than someone who has absolutely no experience of volunteering. Better still, the satisfaction that they get from doing something for the betterment of the society is immense. On the flip side, if a youngster gives too much importance to community work, he may lose his focus on his studies. This, in turn, will hurt his career prospects. In the highly competitive job market, it is impossible to find good job opportunities if you do not have a university degree with good grades. However, not doing unpaid work is not the solution to this problem. Rather, youngsters should have a clear idea of what they want to achieve in life. They should volunteer only during their free time. In conclusion, doing unpaid community work allows young people to gain valuable work experience and better perspectives on life; however, they must ensure that the community work does not distract them from their career goals.
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involved in unpaid social
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. While
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, others argue that it will hurt their
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prospects. In my opinion, it
certainly
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sense for youngsters to engage in
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some
kind of
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community
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work
during their free time;
however
, they should not
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allow
the volunteering to take their focus off their
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career
goals.

Young
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people
reap
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benefits when they engage in unpaid
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work
for the underprivileged sections of the society. This
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allows
them to
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see
the various aspects of
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life
and when they realize that
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many
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people
around them do not even have the
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of
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life
, they will learn to count their blessings.
In addition
, volunteering is a great opportunity to acquire valuable
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work
experience. They can mention these stints in their resume when it is time to apply for a job. Youngsters who have done
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some
kind of
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community
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work
are more likely to
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get
hired than someone who has
absolutely
no experience of volunteering. Better
still
, the satisfaction that they
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get
from doing something for the betterment of the society is immense.

On the flip side, if a
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youngster
gives too much importance to
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community
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work
, he may lose his focus on his studies. This, in turn, will hurt his
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career
prospects. In the
highly
competitive job market, it is impossible to find
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good
job opportunities if you do not have a university degree with
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good
grades.
However
, not doing unpaid
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work
is not the solution to this problem.
Rather
, youngsters should have a
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clear
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idea
of what they want to achieve in
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life
. They should volunteer
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only
during their free time.

In conclusion
, doing unpaid
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community
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work
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allows
young
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people
to gain valuable
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work
experience and better perspectives on
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life
;
however
, they
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must
ensure that the
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community
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work
does not distract them from their
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career
goals.
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IELTS essay Some people think that youngsters should get involved in unpaid work, while others oppose as it may affect their career.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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