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Some people think that young people should spend more of their free time at home with their families and spend less time entertaining outside, Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think that young people should spend more of their free time at home with their families and spend less time entertaining outside, Others disagree. v. 2
All most all the news channels and papers today make use of photographs to illustrate their stories. Some opine that these pictures are useful to understand the news story than reading a paragraph about it. However, in my opinion, I believe limited amount photographs must be used to convey a news. To begin with, the pictures, add certain amount of clarity to a news either on a paper or a TV channel. If there is a photo related to a news it would be easier to understand the news that article trying to say. For instance, every story book has some sort of sketching to represent some parts of the story in order to help the reader to imagine the seen. Hence, a picture in a news story would add the same value to the news that the writer trying to provide. On the other hand, excessive amount of photos would mislead the reader. Some newspapers add many pictures, but do not explain them clearly. As a result, the reader has to build their own story, which in some occasions is not the true story. Same thing happens on news channels as well. For example, a news that has a photo of a person carrying a knife in his hand and a woman lying on the floor with blood. An observer might assume that this is the killer of the women lying on the ground. Yet, in real case it could be the husband trying to save his dying wife. Therefore, too much of photographs without proper explanation would create a different story. To recapitulate, although the pictures are useful to illustrate the news to the observer or reader in a more clear way, excessive use of those would always mislead them by giving a false message
All most
all the
news
channels and papers
today
make
use
of photographs to illustrate their
stories
.
Some
opine that these
pictures
are useful to understand the
news
story
than reading a paragraph about it.
However
, in my opinion, I believe limited amount photographs
must
be
used
to convey
a news
.

To
begin
with, the
pictures
,
add
certain amount of clarity to a
news
either on a paper or a TV channel.
If
there is a photo related to a
news
it would be easier to understand the
news
that article trying to say.
For instance
, every
story
book has
some
sort of sketching to represent
some
parts of the
story
in order to
help
the reader to imagine the
seen
.
Hence
, a
picture
in a
news
story
would
add
the same value to the
news
that the writer trying to provide.

On the other hand
, excessive amount of photos would mislead the reader.
Some
newspapers
add
many
pictures
,
but
do not
explain
them
clearly
.
As a result
, the reader
has to
build their
own
story
, which in
some
occasions is not the true
story
. Same thing happens on
news
channels
as well
.
For example
, a
news
that has a photo of a person carrying a knife in his hand and a woman lying on the floor with blood. An observer might assume that this is the killer of the women lying on the ground.
Yet
, in real case it could be the husband trying to save his dying wife.
Therefore
, too much of photographs without proper explanation would create a
different
story.

To recapitulate, although the
pictures
are useful to illustrate the
news
to the observer or reader in a more
clear
way, excessive
use
of those would always mislead them by giving a false message
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that young people should spend more of their free time at home with their families and spend less time entertaining outside, Others disagree. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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