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Integrated FarmingMany farmers keep animals and raise crops at the same time. While some farmers treat the cultivation of their animals and plants as two separate activities, others integrate the two so that they work together. This is called integrated f v.1

Integrated FarmingMany farmers keep animals and raise crops at the same time. While some farmers treat the cultivation of their animals and plants as two separate activities, others integrate the two so that they work together. This is called integrated f v. 1
Smoking has been banned in public places like parks, hospitals, public transport and restaurants in many nations. This essay agrees with this initiative because it reduces the harmful effects of passive smoking and also encourages smokers to quit. The primary reason why making it illegal to smoke in public makes sense is preventing people from having to breathe in second-hand smoke. Passive smoking can lead to many smoking-related diseases such as lung cancer, heart disease and stroke. The British Medical Association found that non-smokers who were regularly exposed to tobacco smoke were 4 times more likely to develop lung cancer, than those who did not have to breathe it in. Despite this, many smoking activists would say that if people are afraid of getting a disease from smoking, they should not go to places like bars, where lots of people enjoy smoking. The second main reason is that it helps those addicted to cigarettes quit their habit. When smokers and non-smokers socialise together, the smokers are often ostracised from the group because they have to leave the company of everyone else if they want to light up. This has proven particularly effective in Ireland, the first country to introduce a nationwide ban, where people have to leave a bar or restaurant and smoke outside. However, nicotine addiction is one of the most difficult to quit and a ban should be combined with other measures to help addicts to stop. In conclusion, making it against the law to smoke around strangers should be encouraged because it prevents innocent people from dying of passive smoking and reduces the amount of smokers.
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has
been banned
in public places like parks, hospitals, public transport and restaurants in
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nations. This essay
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agrees
with this initiative
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because
it
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reduces
the harmful effects of passive
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smoking
and
also
encourages smokers to quit.

The primary reason why making it illegal to
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smoke
in public
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makes
sense is preventing
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people
from having to breathe in second-hand
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smoke
. Passive
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smoking
can lead to
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many
smoking-related diseases such as lung cancer, heart disease and stroke. The British Medical Association found that non-smokers who were
regularly
exposed to tobacco
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smoke
were 4 times more likely to develop lung cancer, than those who did not
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have to
breathe it in. Despite this,
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many
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smoking
activists would say that if
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people
are afraid of getting a disease from
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smoking
, they should not go to places like bars, where lots of
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people
enjoy smoking.

The second main reason is that it
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helps
those addicted to cigarettes quit their habit. When smokers and non-smokers
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socialise
together, the smokers are
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often
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ostracised
from the group
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because
they
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have to
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leave
the
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company
of everyone else if they want to light up. This has proven
particularly
effective in Ireland, the
first
country to introduce a nationwide ban, where
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people
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have to
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leave
a bar or restaurant and
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smoke
outside.
However
, nicotine addiction is one of the most difficult to quit and a ban should
be combined
with other measures to
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help
addicts to
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stop
.

In conclusion
, making it against the law to
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smoke
around strangers should
be encouraged
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because
it
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prevents
innocent
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people
from dying of passive
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smoking
and
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reduces
the amount of smokers.
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IELTS essay Integrated FarmingMany farmers keep animals and raise crops at the same time. While some farmers treat the cultivation of their animals and plants as two separate activities, others integrate the two so that they work together. This is called integrated f v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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