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Some people think that wildlife does not belong outside of its natural habitat. They do not think that zoos should exist. Others believe that zoos serve an educational purpose that is more important than the rights of the wild animals. Which side of this a v.2

Some people think that wildlife does not belong outside of its natural habitat. They do not think that zoos should exist. Others believe that zoos serve an educational purpose that is more important than the rights of the wild animals. Which side of this a v. 2
Nowadays, animals are widely used in many areas. Some people think it will be unnecessary to use them in the near future. I disagree with this idea to a certain extent. While it is true that animal products can be replaced by synthetic products in the clothing industry, humans will still need animals for food and medical research. We do find a lot of ways to avoid using animals. First many types of alternative foods, invented by scientists, taste like meat but are made of soybeans. So people who eat these fake meat dishes can remain vegetarians and still get all the nutrients they need. Using animals for medical research is indeed cruel and immoral. After all, we do not have the right to kill other forms of life for our benefit. Fortunately, the use of animals in medical research and trials is decreasing rapidly. In the clothing industry, also, it is now possible to avoid using animals. For example, synthetic fur and synthetic silk look as good as the real thing and their production does not involve any cruelty to animals. Even so, it is nearly impossible to stop using animals altogether. For example, fish and meat are an integral part of many cuisines around the world. They are major sources of vitamins, minerals and proteins. Meat substitutes are usually expensive and hard to find in many markets. So, if people are told to stop using animal products, they may fail to get adequate nutrition. Likewise, it is impossible to perform medical research without using animals. Of course, this practice is unethical and scientists are working hard to minimise the use of animals, yet there is no justification for stopping the production of some crucial drugs just because their testing involves animals. In summary, we need to respect animals’ right to live and reduce their use for purposes of vanity; however we cannot avoid using them for meeting our nutritional requirements or performing medical research.
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it will be unnecessary to
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use
them in the near future. I disagree with this
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idea
to a certain extent. While it is true that
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animal
products can
be replaced
by synthetic products in the clothing industry, humans will
still
need
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animals
for food and
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medical
research.

We do find
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a lot of
ways to avoid using
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animals
.
First
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many
types of alternative foods, invented by scientists, taste like
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meat
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but
are made
of soybeans.
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people
who eat these fake
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dishes can remain vegetarians and
still
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get
all the nutrients they need. Using
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animals
for
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medical
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research
is
indeed
cruel and immoral.
After all
, we do not have the right to kill other forms of life for our benefit.
Fortunately
, the
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use
of
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animals
in
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medical
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research
and trials is decreasing
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. In the clothing industry,
also
, it is
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possible to avoid using
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animals
.
For example
, synthetic fur and synthetic silk look as
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good
as the real thing and their production does not involve any cruelty to animals.

Even
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, it is
nearly
impossible to
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using
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animals
altogether.
For example
, fish and
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meat
are an integral part of
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many
cuisines around the world. They are major sources of vitamins, minerals and proteins.
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substitutes are
usually
expensive and
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hard
to find in
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many
markets.
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stop
using
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animal
products, they may fail to
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get
adequate nutrition.
Likewise
, it is impossible to perform
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medical
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research
without using
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animals
.
Of course
, this practice is unethical and scientists are working
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hard
to
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minimise
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animals
,
yet
there is no justification for stopping the production of
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crucial drugs
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just
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because
their testing involves animals.

In summary, we need to respect
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animals’
right to
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live
and
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reduce
their
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use
for purposes of vanity;
however
we cannot avoid using them for meeting our nutritional requirements or performing
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medical
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research
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that wildlife does not belong outside of its natural habitat. They do not think that zoos should exist. Others believe that zoos serve an educational purpose that is more important than the rights of the wild animals. Which side of this a v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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