Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos discuss both these views and give your opinion v.2

Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos 2
In recent years, zoos have become a part of controversial debate. Some people state that animals should not be confined in zoos and others believe that these places have some beneficial purposes for our society. In this essay, I will discuss whether zoos are useful or not and I also shere my opinion. Some people have an aspect that zoos have an important duty for our society. They believe that these places can be used for many purposes. One of them is that these places are good for children' s education. By visiting zoos, children can learn lots of information about animals. Another one is that zoos can be helpful to instil animal love to children. Other purpose of zoos is enterteinment. In these days, many people are using these places in order to have a good time. However, In my opinion, no one has a right to deprive animals of their natural habitat. This such an implemention is seen as a turtore by many animal right supporters. This might be true because animals in zoos have limited areas and it restricks their motions. Moreover, It widely acknowledged that at virtually all animals are social creatures and this places directly undermine animals' social life. It might be true that zoos can be rewarding for children. However, we can find another solution, instead of be kept animals in a restricking lands, to educate our children. For instance, today, there are many beneficial documentaries about animals' life and we can encourage our children to watch them. Overall, although some people see zoos as a place for education or entertainment, I believe that animals rights are much more important than other factors.
In recent years, zoos have become a part of controversial debate.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
state that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
should not
be confined
in zoos
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
and others
believe that these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
beneficial purposes for our society. In this essay, I will discuss whether zoos are useful or not and I
also
Possible spelling mistake found.
shere
my opinion.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have an aspect that zoos have an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
duty for our society. They believe that these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
purposes. One of them is that these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for
Possible spelling mistake found.
children&
#039; s education. By visiting zoos,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
can learn lots of information about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
. Another one is that zoos can be helpful to
Possible spelling mistake. 'instil' is British English.
instil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. Other purpose of zoos is
Possible spelling mistake found.
enterteinment
. In these days,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are using these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
in order to have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
time.

However
, In my opinion, no one has a right to deprive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
of their natural habitat. This such an
Possible spelling mistake found.
implemention
is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
as a
Possible spelling mistake found.
turtore
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
right supporters. This might be true
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
in zoos have limited areas and it
Possible spelling mistake found.
restricks
their motions.
Moreover
, It
widely
acknowledged that at
virtually
all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
are social creatures and this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
directly
undermine
Possible spelling mistake found.
animals&
#039; social life.

It might be true that zoos can be rewarding for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
.
However
, we can find another solution,
instead
of be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
in a
Possible spelling mistake found.
restricking
lands, to educate our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
.
For instance
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
beneficial documentaries about
Possible spelling mistake found.
animals&
#039;
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
life and
we can encourage our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
them.

Overall
, although
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
zoos as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
for education or entertainment, I believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
rights are much more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
than other factors.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
279 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts