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Some people think that when recruiting, companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work indepently while others considered they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. Discuss both views and give your opinion? v.4

Some people think that when recruiting, companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work indepently while others considered they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. v. 4
Hiring is a vital process in an organisation. The human resource department plays vital role in choosing a deserving candidate for a particular position. Certain individual think that when hiring, organisation must focus to take those individuals who are creative and able to work alone. Whereas, others think they must recruit individual who are able to work in a team and follow the guidelines. I strongly support the former opinion as it is necessary for survival in this corporate world. On the one hand, People thinking of hiring staff who can generate new idea and work solely because it is necessary for the existence in this competitive environment and I agree. In 20th century every organisation is competitive in the market to become a pioneer and in this race candidate with superior creative skill is needed and not an applicant who just follow directions. For instance, Apple and Samsung are the two major IT giants and every year there is competition to launch a product in the market with superior quality and facility. Hence a unique person with innovative ideas can only survive here when he creates application or model and manage this solely on his own. On the other hand, People believing of hiring a person who can work in groups and follow the instructions. Individual working in large organisation in service industry this type of model works perfectly because candidate need not put his creative idea. But he has to work as a team player in supporting the rest of the group. Each one in the team work are not competing with one another as the work is shared and collectively carried out by the whole team. Hence each employee needs to take advice and follow the comments of the team. For instance, As per recent research published in the article it was concluded that Nestle Ltd has developed because of the team member effective coordination in the operation. In conclusion, While people vary in their opinion, I completely supported the thought of hiring a candidate with innovative skills and who can work solely without any direction because of its survival in this technological advanced world.
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. The human resource department plays vital role in choosing a deserving
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candidate
for a particular position. Certain
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individual
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,
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focus to take those
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who
are creative and able to
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work
alone. Whereas, others
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recruit
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are able to
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work
in a
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and
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follow
the guidelines. I
strongly
support the former opinion as it is necessary for survival in this corporate world.

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thinking of
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hiring
staff
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who
can generate new
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idea
and
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solely
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agree
. In 20th century every
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candidate
with superior creative
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skill
is needed
and not an applicant
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who
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follow
directions.
For instance
, Apple and Samsung are the two major IT giants and every year there is competition to launch a product in the market with superior quality and facility.
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a unique person with innovative
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ideas
can
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only
survive here when he creates application or model and manage this
solely
on his
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.

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,
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believing of
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hiring
a person
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can
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work
in groups and
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the instructions.
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working in large
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organisation
in service industry this type of model works
perfectly
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because
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candidate
need not put his creative
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idea
.
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work
as a
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player in supporting the rest of the group. Each one in the
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team
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work
are not competing with one another as the
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work
is shared
and
collectively
carried out by the whole
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team
.
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Hence
each employee needs to take advice and
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follow
the comments of the
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team
.
For instance
, As per recent research published in the article it
was concluded
that Nestle Ltd has developed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
team
member effective coordination in the operation.

In conclusion
, While
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people
vary in their opinion, I completely supported the
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thought
of
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hiring
a
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candidate
with innovative
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skills
and
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who
can
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work
solely
without any direction
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because
of its survival in this technological advanced world.
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IELTS essay Some people think that when recruiting, companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work indepently while others considered they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. v. 4

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358 words
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