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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems v.30

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems v. 30
Many people believe that living outside your native country where nobody speaks your primary language can affect your life both in the social aspect and in everyday problems. I strongly agree with this view, and I will provide arguments and examples in the following paragraphs. Personally speaking, socialize is the main problem I would meet abroad. If you don't know the language, you will come across the problem of making new friends, not to mention loving relationships. These situations may cause people to feel alone and depressed, excluded from the local social life. In the second place, but no less important, there is a communication problem that may arise with people working in the medical sector or the police. If you don't speak the local language, you may risk having misunderstandings in crucial conversations with them. Eventually, this can cause serious problems either to your health or to your freedom. For example, if you tell the doctor the wrong medicine you can not assume, you will risk worsening your medical situation instead of getting better. Finally, it is worth to consider everyday problems too. Admittedly, I think that these are less important and serious problems to deal with, although they are more frequent than the previous ones. These are not risky situations, and they can be easily solved, eventually with the universal sign language. To sum up, the necessity of speaking a language abroad can have serious consequences only in risky contexts, like hospital or when you are dealing with local police. Conversely, in everyday life, I firmly believe that language difficulty can be solved with a significant amount of patience and time.
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language
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problems
. I
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agree
with this view, and I will provide arguments and examples in the following paragraphs.

Personally
speaking, socialize is the main
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problem
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meet
abroad. If you don't know the
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language
, you will
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come
across the
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problem
of making new friends, not to mention loving relationships. These situations may cause
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people
to feel alone and depressed, excluded from the local social life.

In the second place,
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but
no less
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important
, there is a communication
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problem
that may arise with
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people
working in the medical sector or the police. If you don't speak the local
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language
, you may
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risk
having misunderstandings in crucial conversations with them.
Eventually
, this can cause serious
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problems
either to your health or to your freedom.
For example
, if you
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tell
the doctor the
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wrong
medicine you can not assume, you will
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worsening your medical situation
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Finally
, it is worth to consider everyday
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too.
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, I
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think
that these are less
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important
and serious
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problems
to deal with, although they are more frequent than the previous ones. These are not risky situations, and they can be
easily
solved,
eventually
with the universal
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sign
language.

To sum up, the necessity of speaking a
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language
abroad can have serious consequences
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only
in risky contexts, like hospital or when you are dealing with local police.
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, in everyday life, I
firmly
believe that
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language
difficulty can
be solved
with a significant amount of patience and time.
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IELTS essay Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems v. 30

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
273 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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