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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs To what extent do you agree v.4

Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs 4
With the increase in the globalisation, more people are travelling from one place to another. Section of society, argue that visitors should comply with the cultural values and tradition of the host country. However, there are others who opine native countries should welcome the tourist with their values. This essay, stress on the combination of both for better understanding between two nations. The first group of people believes that visitors travel to understand the cultural differences and enjoy traditions of different places. Therefore, if visitor shows respect towards the host society, local people will accept and welcome them more enthusiastically. Thus, they will feel more comfortable to interact with local inhabitants and avoid conflicts during their trip. Further, this would ease in communication and understand the host nation more effectively, which may fulfil the purpose of their visit. On the other hand, people who think that people should respect tourist’s culture believe introducing new culture would be better for the society. These days, tourism is big business and support economy to a great extent. Therefore, people and the government should be flexible and admit other cultures if they want to succeed in the tourism industry. Actually, a lot of countries are competing with each other to attract more visitors and making their nations the desired destination and without respecting different cultures, they may be lost in this maddening race. After analysing both the viewpoints, it could be concluded that it is essential for both the local-hides and visitors to adapt to each other values and customs for the success of this new trend of travelling more often.
With the increase in the
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globalisation
, more
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people
are travelling from one place to another. Section of society, argue that
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visitors
should comply with the cultural values and tradition of the host country.
However
, there are others who opine native countries should welcome the tourist with their values. This essay,
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stress
on the combination of both for better understanding between two nations.

The
first
group of
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people
believes that
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visitors
travel to understand the cultural differences and enjoy traditions of
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different
places.
Therefore
, if
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visitor
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shows
respect towards the host society, local
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people
will accept and welcome them more
enthusiastically
.
Thus
, they will feel more comfortable to interact with local inhabitants and avoid conflicts during their trip.
Further
, this would
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ease
in communication and understand the host nation more
effectively
, which may fulfil the purpose of their visit.

On the
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other
hand,
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people
who
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think
that
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people
should respect tourist’s
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culture
believe introducing new
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culture
would be better for the society. These days, tourism is
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big
business and support economy to a great extent.
Therefore
,
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people
and the
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government
should be flexible and admit
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other
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cultures
if they want to succeed in the tourism industry. Actually,
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a lot of
countries are competing with each
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other
to attract more
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visitors
and making their nations the desired destination and without respecting
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different
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cultures
, they may
be lost
in this maddening race.

After
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analysing
both the viewpoints, it could
be concluded
that it is essential for both the local-
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hides
and
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visitors
to adapt to each
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other
values and customs for the success of this new trend of travelling more
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often
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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