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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent do you agree? v.3

Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. v. 3
It is an irrefutable fact that Travelling in different countries always memorable and unforgettable moments, which makes people’s mind fresh. Some people assert that visit in different countries should be difficult, if you don’t know the culture and traditions, where you want to plan to go. I agree with this statement and in this essay, I intend to explain my views before reasonable can be drawn. There are several reasons that why we need to understand the rules and regulations of the other nations. Firstly, there are lots of people travel in other places, due to some official-work or on summer vacations. But, The problem starts, when we do illegal activities which is common in their own country, such as eating food in public areas, not to allow take the photos and filming the local community. For an example, In Singapore, Folks are not allowed inside the building, if you caught by the building manager or staff then definitely there is huge penalty. Moreover, Around the thousands of immigrants move to the other countries such as Canada, Australia, in order to secure a bright future. Most of the students found problems like tradition food, leasing house for rent and community rules. According to the survey conducted by the Canadian Government found ghat 80 percent of the International students work extra hours, instead of working 20 hours as per Canada rule. In addition, which causes problems while applying work-permit after study. To put in a nutshell, I pen down and say that it is very important for everyone, when we visit any place to make sure, learn their culture and human rights of the country, instead of put ourself in trouble.
It is an irrefutable fact that Travelling in
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different
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countries
always memorable and unforgettable moments, which
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makes
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people
’s mind fresh.
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Some
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people
assert that visit in
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different
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countries
should be difficult, if you don’t know the culture and traditions, where you want to plan to go. I
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agree
with this statement and in this essay, I intend to
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explain
my views
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before
reasonable can
be drawn
.

There are several reasons that why we need to understand the
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rules
and regulations of the other nations.
Firstly
, there are lots of
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people
travel in other places, due to
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some
official-work or on summer vacations.
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But
, The problem
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starts
, when we do illegal activities which is common in their
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own
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country
, such as eating food in public areas, not to
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allow
take the photos and filming the local community. For an example, In Singapore, Folks are not
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allowed
inside the building, if you caught by the building manager or staff then definitely there is huge penalty.

Moreover
, Around the thousands of immigrants
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move
to the other
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countries
such as Canada, Australia, in order to secure a bright future. Most of the students found problems like tradition food, leasing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
for rent and community
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
. According to the survey conducted by the Canadian
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
found ghat 80 percent of the International students work extra hours,
instead
of working 20 hours as per Canada
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rule
.
In addition
, which causes problems while applying work-permit after study.

To put in a nutshell, I pen down and say that it is
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very
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important
for everyone, when we visit any place to
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make
sure, learn their culture and human rights of the
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country
,
instead
of put
The term is non-standard and not widely accepted.
ourself
in trouble.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
He who knows no foreign languages knows nothing of his own.
Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

IELTS essay Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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