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1. Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture, they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent do you agree? v.2

1. Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture, they should adapt to the local practices and customs. v. 2
Many people argue that foreigners should adapt to the local customs and traditions when they come to travel in a different culture. I completely agree with this view. Newcomers will certainly face difficulties if they do not conform to the norms of social behavior in the host country. Firstly, there are some limitations on experiencing new culture when visitors do not follow the traditions and customs of the host. For example, in Thailand, if tourists want to visit temples, they have to wear the strict dress code. Especially, women must wear long skirts or long pants to cover up their knees, shoulders should be kept covered and no see-through clothes. Secondly, traveler might fall foul of the law if they do not respect the behavior and customs of locals. In Singapore, for instance, residents will consider newcomers dirty and ill-mannered if they litter the street and spit gum in public places. There are also many benefits for foreigners when they do adopt the customs and traditions of their new country of residence. One advantage is that local people will be more welcoming when they feel that the newcomers are showing respect for the local way of life. The establishment of closer links with the host community might lead to mutual understanding and strong support when troubles come. Another benefit is the richness of the experience which newcomers will gain from enjoying aspects of local customs and traditions, enabling them to participate in community life. For example, in Tet Nguyen Dan, foreign visitors can join Tet’s activities such as setting off firecrackers, going to pagodas to wish the best wishes. In conclusion, I would argue that this is essential for foreigners to follow the traditions and habits of locals in the host community in order to integrate fully into new culture.
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argue that foreigners should adapt to the
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local
customs and
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traditions
when they
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come
to travel in a
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culture. I completely
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agree
with this view.

Newcomers will
certainly
face difficulties if they do not conform to the norms of social behavior in the
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host
country.
Firstly
, there are
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some
limitations on experiencing new culture when visitors do not follow the
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traditions
and customs of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
host
.
For example
, in Thailand, if tourists want to visit temples, they
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have to
wear the strict dress code.
Especially
, women
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must
wear long skirts or long pants to cover up their knees, shoulders should be
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kept
covered and no
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see
-through clothes.
Secondly
, traveler might fall foul of the law if they do not respect the behavior and customs of
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locals
. In Singapore,
for instance
, residents will consider newcomers dirty and ill-mannered if they litter the street and spit gum in public places.

There are
also
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many
benefits for foreigners when they do adopt the customs and
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traditions
of their new country of residence. One advantage is that
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local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will be more welcoming when they feel that the newcomers are showing respect for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
way of life. The establishment of closer links with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
host
community might lead to mutual understanding and strong support when troubles
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
. Another benefit is the richness of the experience which newcomers will gain from enjoying aspects of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
customs and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditions
, enabling them to participate in community life.
For example
, in Tet Nguyen Dan, foreign visitors can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
Tet’s activities such as setting off firecrackers, going to pagodas to wish the best wishes.

In conclusion
, I would argue that this is essential for foreigners to follow the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditions
and habits of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
locals
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
host
community in order to integrate
fully
into new culture.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay 1. Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture, they should adapt to the local practices and customs. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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