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Some people think that violent films and videogames have negative effects on people and should be banned Others think that they are just relaxation sources Discuss both sides and give opinion v.2

Some people think that violent films and videogames have negative effects on people and should be banned Others think that they are just relaxation sources 2
Nowadays, media has become a main entertainment source for human. Some individuals would like to see censorship of films full of violence and a ban on video games as they have detrimental effects on people whereas others opine that they are just meant to entertain and calm you and nothing else. This essay intends to analyze both perspectives and side with the latter view. To begin with, those who oppose violence in movies and video games say that there is lots of evidence supporting the fact that violent video games are bad. As per a research, brains of children after playing these kinds of games show an increase in the activity in some parts of brain cells, which stimulates emotions and decreases self-control and concentration. As a result, people are not able to take control and might act out, hurting others or themselves. Violent video games have been linked to school shootings, increases in bullying, and raised aggression in children. What is more, children who are exposed to too much violence in films at a young age become immune to violence. Moreover, those who view violent movies and video games as just relaxation sources, say that video games can reduce stress by distracting adult gamers from the pressures of everyday life. College students attempting to juggle school, part-time work, finances and household chores, for example, might find button-mashing violence to be a safe and enjoyable way to release pent-up frustrations. According to a 2010 study conducted by a Texas University professor, violent video games can be used as therapeutic outlets for combat depression and anger. Furthermore, humans have been engaging in violence since there have been humans whereas movies and video games are rather recent inventions. As such, exposure to them cannot be a necessary cause of violence. After all, there would have been no violence until they were invented if this were the case. With the popularity of violent video games, they have also become some of the best socialization tools. Many violent video games are successful because they share an emphasis on multiplayer features. The best-selling Call of Duty franchise, for example, uses online combat in a familiar war-scenario to foster competitive, fun environments. To sum up, violent movies and video games might have a bad reputation, but we cannot deny the possible benefits reaped from playing them. After all, violence is everywhere these days — in the news and on television — so video games targeted at having fun and relieving stress should not be held responsible for violence and should definitely not be banned.
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as they have detrimental effects on
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whereas others opine that they are
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meant to entertain and calm you and nothing else. This essay intends to analyze both perspectives and side with the latter view.

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are
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. As per a research, brains of children after playing these kinds of
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games
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an increase in the activity in
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parts of brain cells, which stimulates emotions and decreases self-control and concentration.
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people
are not able to take control and might act out, hurting others or themselves.
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have
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to school shootings, increases in bullying, and raised aggression in children.
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in films at a young age become immune to violence.

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, those who view
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and
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as
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relaxation sources, say that
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can
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reduce
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by distracting adult gamers from the pressures of everyday life. College students attempting to juggle school, part-time work, finances and household chores,
for example
, might find button-mashing
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violence
to be a safe and enjoyable way to release pent-up frustrations. According to a 2010 study conducted by a Texas University professor,
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violent
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video
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can be
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used
as therapeutic outlets for combat depression and anger.

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, humans have been engaging in
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violence
since there have been humans whereas
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movies
and
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video
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games
are
rather
recent inventions. As such, exposure to them cannot be a necessary cause of
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violence
.
After all
, there would have been no
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violence
until they
were invented
if this were the case. With the popularity of
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violent
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, they have
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of the best socialization tools.
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are successful
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they share an emphasis on multiplayer features. The best-selling Call of Duty franchise,
for example
,
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uses
online combat in a familiar war-scenario to foster competitive, fun environments.

To sum up,
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and
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video
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might have a
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reputation,
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we cannot deny the possible benefits reaped from playing them.
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,
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is everywhere these days — in the news and on television —
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video
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targeted at having fun and relieving
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should not
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violence
and should definitely not
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IELTS essay Some people think that violent films and videogames have negative effects on people and should be banned Others think that they are just relaxation sources 2

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