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Many people work from home using modern technology today Some people think that only the workers benefit from this and not employers Do you agree or disagree v.2

Many people work from home using modern technology today Some people think that only the workers benefit from this and not employers v. 2
Currently, the modern technology is indeed a blessing to the mankind. Telecommuting is one of those which have become very popular and exercised by millions of people when internet connections are very fast and reliable. This innovation is helpful to both employees and employers. However, employees get higher advantages from it. To begin with, working from home brings several benefits to the employees. To enumerate, employees need not to travel for work which saves money and time. Consequently, it helps workers to pay more attention to work and family by reducing excessive stress of commuting between office and home. To illustrate, money saved in travel is used to fulfill the demands of family and time is devoted to children and other family members. Moreover, it gives freedom of no fixed time when working from home, thus work schedule is adjusted to the comfort of an employee. Although most of the work done by tele-workers is monitored, still a few minutes can be snatched at times. Finally, the tele-worker can do some side business side by side. In other words, involving in different works gives an opportunity of increased income and more money. On other hand, the trend not only benefited employees but employers are benefited in many ways as well. Firstly, it saves cost spent on expensive office. To explain, office needs big space and infrastructure to provide all facilities at work and include exorbitant expenses which is avoided by telecommuting. Secondly, employers can hire people across the world as opportunity free them from all geographical ties, it provides more talented labor at cheaper rates, so add to savings too. In India, for example, many multinational companies hire run business successfully with no actual office and have big turnovers. Furthermore, it has been seen that employees take less sick leave and other leaves. This is also beneficial for employers. On paradoxical side, monitoring and supervising employees is difficult so it affects the work productivity. To illustrate, training to employees is mandatory and cannot be provided at home. In the light of all facts one can conclude that, working from home using modern technology is good option but it offers more conveniences and benefits to employees rather than the employers.
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, the modern technology is
indeed
a blessing to the mankind. Telecommuting is one of those which have become
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very
popular and exercised by millions of
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people
when internet connections are
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very
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fast
and reliable. This innovation is helpful to both
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employees
and
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employers
.
However
,
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employees
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get
higher advantages from it.

To
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begin
with, working from home brings several benefits to the
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employees
. To enumerate,
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employees
need not
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to travel
for
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work
which saves money and
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time
.
Consequently
, it
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helps
workers to pay more attention to
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work
and family by reducing excessive
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stress
of commuting between
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office
and home. To illustrate, money saved in travel is
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used
to fulfill the demands of family and
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time
is devoted
to children and
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other
family members.
Moreover
, it gives freedom of no
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fixed
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time
when working from home,
thus
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work
schedule
is adjusted
to the comfort of an
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employee
. Although most of the
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work
done by
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tele-workers
is monitored
,
still
a few minutes can
be snatched
at
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times
.
Finally
, the
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tele-worker
can do
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some
side business side by side. In
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other
words, involving in
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different
works gives an opportunity of increased income and more money.

On
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other
hand, the trend not
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only
benefited
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employees
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but
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employers
are benefited
in
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many
ways
as well
.
Firstly
, it saves cost spent on expensive
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office
. To
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explain
,
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office
needs
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big
space and infrastructure to provide all facilities at
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work
and include exorbitant expenses which
is avoided
by telecommuting.
Secondly
,
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employers
can hire
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people
across the world as opportunity free them from all geographical ties, it provides more talented labor at cheaper rates,
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so
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add
to savings too. In India,
for example
,
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many
multinational
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companies
hire run business
successfully
with no actual
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office
and have
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big
turnovers.
Furthermore
, it has been
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seen
that
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employees
take less sick
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leave
and
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other
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leaves
. This is
also
beneficial for
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employers
. On paradoxical side, monitoring and supervising
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employees
is difficult
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so
it affects the
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work
productivity. To illustrate, training to
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employees
is mandatory and cannot
be provided
at home.

In the light of all facts one can conclude that, working from home using modern technology is
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good
option
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but
it offers more conveniences and benefits to
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employees
rather
than the
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employers
.
21Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people work from home using modern technology today Some people think that only the workers benefit from this and not employers v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
369 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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