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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. v.3

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. v. 3
Whether the role of a university is to prepare graduates for a particular profession or to teach fixed lessons without any emphasis on the profession, this may be an issue to be discussed. This essay believes that the main task of universities is to prepare their graduates for their future jobs. Most university students think of certain professions for a comfortable future, and these often become professions that require hard work, and they must have a good university education in order to have these professions. The most important duty of the universities is to provide the highest possible education to their students so that they can provide a very good future. If universities give lessons without paying attention to the jobs that students want, most graduates would probably not have the profession they wanted and they would live an unhappy life. If universities try to fulfil each student's wishes and classify them according to their interests, both students have the professions they want and thus they are happy, and the university the university would be known by the people. But universities should be very careful in doing this, because they have to show their university students how to do what they want, not what it is their job, and how to proceed, so, that the graduate finishes his/her university with a high level of knowledge and starts his profession. In short, universities should classify their students according to the departments they want instead of just giving specific lessons and give them an education accordingly, and they should also prepare them for the future.
Whether the role of a
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university
is to prepare
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graduates
for a particular
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profession
or to teach
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fixed
lessons without any emphasis on the
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profession
, this may be an issue to
be discussed
. This essay believes that the main task of
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universities
is to prepare their
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graduates
for their
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future
jobs.

Most
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university
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students
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think
of certain
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professions
for a comfortable
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future
, and these
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often
become
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professions
that require
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hard
work, and they
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must
have a
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good
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university
education in order to have these
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professions
. The most
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important
duty of the
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universities
is to provide the highest possible education to their
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students
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so
that they can provide a
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very
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good
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future
. If
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give lessons without paying attention to the jobs that
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students
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want
, most
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graduates
would
probably
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profession
they
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wanted and
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live
an unhappy life. If
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universities
try to fulfil each student's wishes and classify them according to their interests, both
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students
have the
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professions
they
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want
and
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the
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would
be known
by the
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people
.
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should be
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careful in doing this,
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how to do what they
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want
, not what it is their job, and how to proceed,
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so
, that the
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graduate
finishes his/her
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university
with a high level of knowledge and
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starts
his profession.

In short,
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should classify their
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students
according to the departments they
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want
instead
of
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just
giving specific lessons and give them an education
accordingly
, and they should
also
prepare them for the
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future
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4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. v. 3

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
263 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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