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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. Discuss both view and give your own opinion v.11

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. 11
Whether universities are responsible for supplying their graduates with the knowledge and skills required in working life is still a question of controversy. Some people claim that universities are under no obligation in doing such job, they can choose to deliver whatever courses beneficial for their own good. I personally favour the former idea for some following reasons. For the first reason, since universities are the preferred choice of millions of students in order to have a stable income later on, they must ensure that they can be capable of equipping the fundamental basis for students. To be more specific, this must be the knowledge and skills that employers are expecting to see in candidates. For example, an IT manager will seek for applicants who have acquired for themselves the required knowledge throughout the academic years when studying in universities. In addition to the first argument, students have to pay a great deal of money for tuition fees with the aim of obtaining the knowledge and skills in particular fields. Hence, universities are responsible for delivering what students expect to receive, not what they find advantageous for their curricula. On the other hand, universities nowadays act as a trustworthy trainer of students, transforming them into highly productive and knowledgeable workers in their chosen occupations. Therefore, if universities equip students with irrelevant knowledge or simply impractical and inapplicable, they can hardly contribute anything to society. However, theoretical knowledge is insufficient. Thus, universities need to organize some postgraduate training course aiming at sharpening the graduates’ soft skills. This will surprisingly enhance their ability to work efficiently in a high-pressure environment. To conclude, I believe that the role of universities is of great importance. Therefore, their curricula as well as the methods of delivery cannot be decided for their own good. These are extremely crucial to graduates, which need to meet the requirements of employers for a bright prospect ahead.
Whether
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universities
are responsible for supplying their graduates with the
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knowledge
and
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skills
required in working life is
still
a question of controversy.
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Some
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people
claim that
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universities
are under no obligation in doing such job, they can choose to deliver whatever courses beneficial for their
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own
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good
. I
personally
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favour
the former
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idea
for
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some
following reasons.

For the
first
reason, since
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universities
are the preferred choice of millions of
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students
in order to have a stable income later on, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
ensure that they can be capable of equipping the fundamental basis for
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students
. To be more specific, this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
that employers are expecting to
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see
in candidates.
For example
, an IT manager will seek for applicants who have acquired for themselves the required
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
throughout the academic years when studying in
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universities
.
In addition
to the
first
argument,
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students
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have to
pay a great deal of money for tuition fees with the aim of obtaining the
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knowledge
and
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skills
in particular
fields.
Hence
,
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universities
are responsible for delivering what
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students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
to receive, not what they find advantageous for their curricula.

On the other hand
,
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universities
nowadays act as a trustworthy trainer of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
, transforming them into
highly
productive and knowledgeable workers in their chosen occupations.
Therefore
, if
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universities
equip
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students
with irrelevant
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knowledge
or
simply
impractical and inapplicable, they can hardly contribute anything to society.
However
, theoretical
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knowledge
is insufficient.
Thus
,
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universities
need to organize
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
postgraduate training course aiming at sharpening the graduates’ soft
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
. This will
surprisingly
enhance their ability to work
efficiently
in a high-pressure environment.

To conclude
, I believe that the role of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
universities
is of great importance.
Therefore
, their curricula
as well
as the methods of delivery cannot
be decided
for their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
. These are
extremely
crucial to graduates, which need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the requirements of employers for a bright prospect ahead.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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