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We all work or will work in our jobs with many different kinds of people. In your opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (someone you work closely with)? v.4

We all work or will work in our jobs with many different kinds of people. In your opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (someone you work closely with)? v. 4
A large number of people spend most of their time at work. Our life is divided into three equal parts: 8 hours - sleep, 8 hours - work, 8 hours - family time. So, in the most cases, one's co-worker plays an important role in one's life. From my opinion, the essential characteristics of a co-worker are the following. First of all, a person who works closely with me must like his job. I think it is very important for a person to feel satisfaction with his job. My husband is a software developer. He is fond of his job and people enjoy working with him because they see how many energy he puts into his job. Secondly, my co-worker must be persistent and never give up. I like when people who came across a problem try to solve it, find a good decision instead of looking for another person to hand it over. Another important aspect of this is that a good worker should always ask himself "What can be improved? " and suggests new solutions. In addition, he must be a good team player. In the modern world, good communication skills and the ability to work in a team are among the common position requirements. Personally, I think it is great to help each other, share new ideas, develop new solutions, etc. It helps to create a team spirit and improve labour productivity. Finally, my co-worker must be punctual. He or she should finish the job on time I think that It is unacceptable to make the rest of a team wait while a person finishes his or her job. Also, my "ideal co-worker" should always be ready to offer his or her help and be supportive. To summarise, I think if a co-worker possesses all of these qualities mentioned above he can make work with him really enjoyable and productive.
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into three equal parts: 8 hours
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sleep, 8 hours
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family time.
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co-worker
plays an
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role in one's life. From my opinion, the essential characteristics of a
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co-worker
are the following.

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person
who works
closely
with me
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must
like his
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job
. I
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think
it is
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very
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important
for a
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person
to feel satisfaction with his
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job
. My husband is a software developer. He is fond of his
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job
and
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people
enjoy working with him
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they
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he puts into his
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must
be persistent and never give up. I like when
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people
who came across a problem try to solve it, find a
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good
decision
instead
of looking for another
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person
to hand it over. Another
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important
aspect of this is that a
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good
worker should always ask himself
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?
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and
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be a
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good
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player. In the modern world,
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good
communication
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skills
and the ability to
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work
in a
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team
are among the common position requirements.
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think
it is great to
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help
each other, share new
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helps
to create a
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team
spirit and
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improve
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productivity.
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co-worker
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must
be punctual. He or she should finish the
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job
on time I
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that It is unacceptable to
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the rest of a
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team
wait while a
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finishes
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his or her
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job
.
Also
, my
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ideal co-worker
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should always be ready to offer
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his or her
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help
and be supportive.

To
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summarise
, I
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think
if a
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co-worker
possesses all of these qualities mentioned above he can
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make
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work
with him
really
enjoyable and productive.
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32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
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IELTS essay We all work or will work in our jobs with many different kinds of people. In your opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (someone you work closely with)? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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