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Some people think that they can be fit by going to the gym, while others think that there are other better ways to remain fit. Discuss both views along with your opinion. v.2

Some people think that they can be fit by going to the gym, while others think that there are other better ways to remain fit. v. 2
There are those who think going to the gym is the best way to stay in shape while others disagree. In this essay, I am going to examine both points of view and then give my perspective on the matter. On one side of the argument, there are people who believe the benefits of exercising at the gym considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing this is that trainers working in gyms are specialists in bodybuilding; they know the most effective way to make a beautiful body shape in the short term. It is also possible to say that gyms have every equipment that is prepared for the individuals’ purposes. A good illustration of this is when professional wrestlers need to be fit and pumped they always go to the gym to use numerous exercise machines. On the other hand, it is also possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact, nowadays YouTubers are replacing gyms by introducing an enormous number of home exercises. People often have this opinion because they believe that so many former or present movie stars are instructing viewers in many channels. A second point is that actually, doing cardio exercises such as running or cycling is way more essential to be thinner; so many healthy people have gorgeous bodies would run or ride a bicycle on the daily basis. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance, however, I feel that going to the gym to be fit is the best-suited way for me because there are exemplary and qualified trainers, and even athletes go to the gym to use a lot of exercising equipment. Given this situation, it is recommended for people to have a spirit, go to the gym regularly, and make a good relation whip with trainers.
There are those who
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is the best way to stay in shape while others disagree. In this essay, I am going to examine both points of view and then give my perspective on the matter.

On one side of the argument, there are
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people
who believe the benefits of exercising at the
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gym
considerably
outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing this is that trainers working in
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gyms
are specialists in bodybuilding; they know the most effective way to
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make
a
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beautiful
body shape in the short term. It is
also
possible to say that
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gyms
have every equipment that
is prepared
for the individuals’ purposes. A
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good
illustration of this is when professional wrestlers need to
be fit
and pumped they always go to the
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gym
to
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use
numerous exercise machines.

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possible to
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make
the opposing case. It is
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often
argued that in fact, nowadays YouTubers are replacing
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gyms
by introducing an enormous number of home exercises.
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have this opinion
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former or present movie stars are instructing viewers in
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channels. A second point is that actually, doing cardio exercises such as running or cycling is way more essential to be thinner;
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healthy
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have gorgeous bodies would run or ride a bicycle on the daily basis.

In conclusion
, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance,
however
, I feel that going to the
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gym
to
be fit
is the best-suited way for me
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because
there are exemplary and qualified trainers, and even athletes go to the
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gym
to
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use
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a lot of
exercising equipment.
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Given
this situation, it
is recommended
for
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people
to have a spirit, go to the
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regularly
, and
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make
a
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relation whip with trainers.
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IELTS essay Some people think that they can be fit by going to the gym, while others think that there are other better ways to remain fit. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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