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Many people regard the film as less important art forms than literature and paintings. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Many people regard the film as less important art forms than literature and paintings. v. 1
The other art forms are considered more significant as compared to movies by the masses. I am wholly against the notion because cinema is one of the best sources to convey information, and even illiterate individuals can also learn through it. To commence with, films are the best way to portray any story and event that occurred in the past because the visuals mot only create interest of people in the story, but also help them to understand the situation. For example, in a recent survey, it is found that almost 70 percent of people in the world watch movies to learn about history rather than reading it because they find it difficult to read and understand, so they prefer movies. Hence, films play a substantial role to convey information. Moreover, movies cater to a larger audience than other art forms as the maximum number of people prefer to watch films rather than going to any exhibition. Besides, the illiterate masses can also learn about history and culture through it. For instance, the literacy rate in India is approximately 70 percent, and these literate people can read about their forefathers from the books, but the rest 30 percent cannot do it since they do not know how to read. Consequently, films are essential to display the past. Therefore, it is apparent that movies are also a significant form of art. To summarize, literature and paintings are good art forms, however less important compared with the movies. In my opinion, movies are necessary as it portrays the events as well as helps everyone to gain knowledge about forefathers.
The other art
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forms
are considered
more significant as compared to
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movies
by the masses. I am wholly against the notion
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because
cinema is one of the best sources to convey information, and even illiterate individuals can
also
learn through it.

To commence with, films are the best way to portray any story and
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event
that occurred in the past
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because
the
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visuals
mot
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only
create interest of
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people
in the story,
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but
also
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help
them to understand the situation.
For example
, in a recent survey, it
is found
that almost 70 percent of
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people
in the world
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watch
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movies
to learn about history
rather
than reading it
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because
they find it difficult to read and understand,
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so
they prefer
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movies
.
Hence
, films play a substantial role to convey information.

Moreover
,
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movies
cater to a larger audience than other art
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forms
as the maximum number of
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people
prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
films
rather
than going to any exhibition.
Besides
, the illiterate masses can
also
learn about history and culture through it.
For instance
, the literacy rate in India is approximately 70 percent, and these literate
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people
can read about their forefathers from the books,
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but
the rest 30 percent cannot do it since they do not know how to read.
Consequently
, films are essential to display the past.
Therefore
, it is apparent that
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movies
are
also
a significant
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form
of art.

To summarize
, literature and paintings are
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good
art
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forms
,
however
less
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important
compared with the
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movies
. In my opinion,
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movies
are necessary as it portrays the
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events
as well
as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
everyone to gain knowledge about forefathers.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people regard the film as less important art forms than literature and paintings. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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