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Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. v. 2
It is widely argued that government should impose a strict law to prevent noise pollution becoming a means of disruption to other people. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a strict law against noise pollution. Having a firm law against the noise caused by the people will certainly benefit others. It will help in reducing noise pollution as well as it will in reducing health effect like stress, hearing loss and communication problems. Imposing a rule to control noise will have a greater impact to reduce noise pollution while if noise is reduced children, old people, and animals would suffer from hearing loss, stress and poor concentration. For instance, in INDIA during festival season noise pollution increases by 40% than normal days. This leads to hearing loss in children and animal, also affecting their health. Nevertheless, we cannot control certain noise like industrial, drilling, construction. For every country developed or developing, need industries and has to build new infrastructure in order to meet the requirements. However, if there is a law to stop noise, then there would be no development. For example, even for building a normal tar road there are various machinery is involved from drilling, rolling mill, tar-laying truck. It is not possible to stop the noise that is made by these machines In conclusion, there should be a certain restriction on the noise caused by people as there are various health problem related to it, but it should also be considered that certain sounds cannot be controlled
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widely
argued that
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government
should impose a strict
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law
to
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prevent
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noise
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pollution
becoming a means of disruption to other
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people
. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a strict
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law
against
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noise
pollution.

Having a firm
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law
against the
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noise
caused by the
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people
will
certainly
benefit others. It will
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help
in reducing
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noise
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pollution
as well
as it will in reducing health effect like
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stress
, hearing loss and communication problems. Imposing a
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rule
to control
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noise
will have a greater impact to
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reduce
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noise
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pollution
while if
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noise
is
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reduced
children,
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old
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people
, and animals would suffer from hearing loss,
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stress
and poor concentration.
For instance
, in INDIA during festival season
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noise
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pollution
increases by 40% than normal days. This leads to hearing loss in children and animal,
also
affecting their health.

Nevertheless
, we cannot control certain
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noise
like industrial, drilling, construction. For every country developed or developing, need industries and
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has to
build new infrastructure in order to
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meet
the requirements.
However
, if there is a
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law
to
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stop
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noise
, then there would be no development.
For example
, even for building a normal tar road there are various machinery
is involved
from drilling, rolling mill, tar-laying truck. It is not possible to
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stop
the
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noise
that
is made
by these machines

In conclusion
, there should be a certain restriction on the
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noise
caused by
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people
as there are various health
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problem
related to it,
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but
it should
also
be considered
that certain sounds cannot be
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controlled
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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