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Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they can just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.8

Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they can just make as much noise as they want. v. 8
There is no doubt that thoughts around making noises or not are increasingly debatable. While it has been contemplated by a number of individuals that authorities should fine for producing intolerable sound, others argue that the freedom needs to be given to people making noise. However, I do accord with the former statement and in this essay, I will highlight both the views. First and foremost, many people think that they possess the liberty to do whatever they wish to do at certain times. Considering that their mental situation or condition might not as healthy as others, it would be better to not to forbid them. According to a Harvard University study in 2011, there are a growing number of urban adolescents put metal songs in a loudspeaker, which represents a process of venting their mood and negative feelings. Furthermore, if these noisemakers are being restricted with social rules and norms, they may turn out to be more rebellious than before. On the other hand, the power of sharp hearing would gradually decline because of the absence of sound-controlling rule. This means that continuous noises are often putting young people to not only concentrate less, but also hear low in the near future. For instance, many high school students, who reside beside busiest roads, cannot pay attention or take proper notes from teachers' lectures like most other pupils. As a consequence, the next generation might not be revamped as a productive one since a peaceful ambience like earlier days could not be ensured with the policies and regulations. To sum up, although the freedom of choice can be assured by letting people to generate a cacophonous place, people's skill and future can be risen to a next level just because of a peaceful environment. In my opinion, better results are awaiting with the next noiseless world.
There is no doubt that thoughts around making noises or not are
increasingly
debatable. While it has
been contemplated
by a number of individuals that authorities should fine for producing intolerable sound, others argue that the freedom needs to be
given
to
people
making noise.
However
, I do accord with the former statement and in this essay, I will highlight both the views.

First
and foremost,
many
people
think
that they possess the liberty to do whatever they wish to do at certain times. Considering that their mental situation or condition might not as healthy as others, it would be better
to not to
forbid them. According to a Harvard University study in 2011, there are a growing number of urban adolescents put metal songs in a loudspeaker, which represents a process of venting their mood and
negative
feelings.
Furthermore
, if these noisemakers are
being restricted
with social
rules
and norms, they may turn out to be more rebellious than
before
.

On the
other
hand, the power of sharp hearing would
gradually
decline
because
of the absence of sound-controlling
rule
. This means that continuous noises are
often
putting young
people
to not
only
concentrate less,
but
also
hear low in the near future.
For instance
,
many
high school students, who reside beside busiest roads, cannot pay attention or take proper notes from teachers' lectures like most
other
pupils. As a consequence, the
next
generation might not
be revamped
as a productive one since a peaceful ambience like earlier days could not
be ensured
with the policies and regulations.

To sum up, although the freedom of choice can
be assured
by letting
people
to generate a cacophonous place,
people
's
skill
and future can
be risen
to a
next
level
just
because
of a peaceful environment. In my opinion, better results are awaiting with the
next
noiseless world.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they can just make as much noise as they want. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7.5
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