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Some people think that the teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Other believe that teenagers should focus on the subject they are best at or they are most interested in. To what extent do you agree? Write at least 250 words. v.3

Some people think that the teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Other believe that teenagers should focus on the subject they are best at or they are most interested in. v. 3
It is irrefutable that the schools are the foundation stone to one's learning curve. While some people believe that student should focus more on the subject they like the most, other believe that giving importance to all the subject is of great importance. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and support my view with examples. The most significant advantage of giving equal importance to all subjects is the liberty. The students are not always aware of the career path they will choose. For instance, someone might be good at drawing, but he has never thought of being an artist, instead always wanted to be a mechanical engineer. In other words, only because the student has an interest in one subject, doesn't mean he should shift his entire focus at such an early age. As a result, if the teenager loses his interest in a few years, he would be left with no choice. On the other hand, there are few children who are a prodigy. They can do things a lot quicker than anyone else in the fields of academic or athletic. For example, a child in Asia was called human computer, as he can do calculations at the same speed a calculator can. For someone like him as well other subjects are of great importance, as he need to learn language to communicate and use his knowledge to merge with other subject making it more useful. As a result, it would be difficult for even the brightest of mind to focus on one subject and succeed. In conclusion, despite the people supporting the students to focus on a subject more than others. In my view, the students should not focus on a single subject in an early stage of their studies. They should provide themselves enough time to know all the subjects and then choose a subject which indulges with their career path.
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believe that
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focus
more on the
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they like the most,
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other
believe that giving
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importance
to all the
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subject
is of great
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importance
. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and support my view with examples.

The most significant advantage of giving equal
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importance
to all
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subjects
is the liberty. The
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students
are not always aware of the career path they will choose.
For instance
, someone might be
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good
at drawing,
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but
he has never
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thought
of being an artist,
instead
always wanted to be a mechanical engineer. In
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other
words,
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because
the
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student
has an interest in one
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, doesn't mean he should shift his entire
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focus
at such an early age.
As a result
, if the
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teenager
loses his interest in a few years, he would be
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left
with no choice.

On the
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other
hand, there are few children who are a prodigy. They can do things a lot quicker than anyone else in the fields of academic or athletic.
For example
, a child in Asia
was called
human computer, as he can do calculations at the same speed a calculator can.

For someone like him
as well
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other
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subjects
are of great
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importance
, as he need to learn language to communicate and
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use
his knowledge to merge with
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other
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subject
making it more useful.
As a result
, it would be difficult for even the brightest of mind to
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focus
on one
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subject
and succeed.

In conclusion
, despite the
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people
supporting the
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students
to
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focus
on a
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subject
more than others. In my view, the
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students
should not
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focus
on a single
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subject
in an early stage of their studies. They should provide themselves
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enough
time to know all the
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subjects
and then choose a
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subject
which indulges with their career path.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that the teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Other believe that teenagers should focus on the subject they are best at or they are most interested in. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
319 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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