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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of the most people's lives others think that adult life brings more happiness in spite of greater responsibilities v.2

Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of the most people's lives others think that adult life brings more happiness in spite of greater responsibilities v. 2
When it comes to the changing of climate, it is often argued that people have to learn methods for adapting themselves with it. I do not see eye-to-eye with those who claim this assertion, because of two compelling reasons explained in this essay. First and foremost, it is not rational to ignore changes occurring on our planet. In other words, being flexible about environmental problems may lead to catastrophic results. Not only have individuals a pivotal role in climate change in their living time, but they are also responsible for next generations. It is well proven that in most cases we can either stop or delay the process of climate change simply by some alterations in our lifestyle. For instance, it is obvious that if we reduce burning of fossil fuels by using renewable energies, the production of green gases will be declined dramatically; consequently global warming will be significantly slowed. Furthermore, people can positively impact the government decision. That is to say that if people become indifferent to the actions of authorities, politicians will also become careless about our environment by not determining a particular budget to tackle these disasters. Hence, citizens have a civil right to request from their government to take action for tackling issues like global warming. Running campaigns is an ideal example of this right. By establishing NGOs and movements, people can force politicians to impose new laws which positively contribute to the climate change phenomenon. To conclude, In my opinion, people should not be ignorant about their society and happenings around them. Adaptation is not the final solution for vital issues such as global warming. It is the citizens' duty to act in the means of eroding such disasters.
When it
comes
to the changing of
climate
, it is
often
argued that
people
have to
learn methods for adapting themselves with it. I do not
see
eye-to-eye with those who claim this assertion,
because
of two compelling reasons
explained
in this essay.

First
and foremost, it is not rational to
ignore
changes
occurring on our planet.
In other words
, being flexible about environmental problems may lead to catastrophic results. Not
only
have individuals a pivotal role in
climate
change
in their living time,
but
they are
also
responsible for
next
generations. It is well proven that
in most cases
we can either
stop
or delay the process of
climate
change
simply
by
some
alterations in our lifestyle.
For instance
, it is obvious that if we
reduce
burning of fossil fuels by using renewable energies, the production of green gases will
be declined
dramatically
;
consequently
global warming will be
significantly
slowed.

Furthermore
,
people
can
positively
impact the
government
decision.
That is
to say that if
people
become indifferent to the actions of authorities, politicians will
also
become careless about our environment by not determining a particular budget to tackle these disasters.
Hence
, citizens have a civil right to request from their
government
to take action for tackling issues like global warming. Running campaigns is an ideal example of this right. By establishing NGOs and movements,
people
can force politicians to impose new laws which
positively
contribute to the
climate
change
phenomenon.

To conclude
, In my opinion,
people
should not be ignorant about their society and happenings around them. Adaptation is not the final solution for vital issues such as global warming. It is the citizens' duty to act in the means of eroding such disasters.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of the most people's lives others think that adult life brings more happiness in spite of greater responsibilities v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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