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Do memories hinder or help people in their effort to learn from the past andsucceed in the present? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on thisissue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, s v.1

Do memories hinder or help people in their effort to learn from the past andsucceed in the present? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on thisissue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, s v. 1
Overpopulation and the development of modern cities have many adverse impacts on the natural environment. Therefore, it is vital that people should take into account this problem. The essay will provide what the benefits it brings if natural spots are preserved and suggest some solutions. When it comes to protecting rural areas, there are two positives that can be discussed. Firstly, our next generations are able to live in the surroundings which still maintains their biodiversity. This is due to the fact that these beauty spots promote a healthy ecosystem. For example, if people do not protect them, it would be possible that our next younger may lose national pride. Secondly, some famous hotspots can attract the number of tourists to visit countries, which can bring an amount of income for local government. Hence, it brings the high demand for job opportunities in travel industries, such restaurants, hotels and travel spots, which also boosts the national economy. In terms of the solution of over exploiting urban cities, the issue could be addressed by governments introducing new laws in order to restrict private firms so as not to over operate. This might reduce the degradation of the environment from industrial pollution that helps people still having peaceful places to visit and enjoy. For individuals to tackle this problem is to be aware of the hygiene of public areas, in particular some main hot spots. To do so, people are likely to sustain the beauty of natural spots and also give next generation better surroundings. In conclusion, preserving natural areas brings many benefits to our lives, such as providing a better environment for our next generation and attract many more tourists to visit countries. Thus, governments and individuals play an important part of role to do so. The solution could be for governments to introduce new regulations to limit firms operating natural spots and for individuals to appreciate the hygiene of public areas.
Overpopulation and the development of modern cities have
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many
adverse impacts on the
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natural
environment.
Therefore
, it is vital that
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people
should take into account this problem. The essay will provide what the benefits it
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brings
if
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natural
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spots
are preserved
and suggest
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some
solutions.

When it
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comes
to protecting rural
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areas
, there are two positives that can
be discussed
.
Firstly
, our
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next
generations are able to
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live
in the surroundings which
still
maintains their biodiversity.
This is due to the fact that
these beauty
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spots
promote a healthy ecosystem.
For example
, if
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people
do not protect them, it would be possible that our
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next
younger may lose national pride.
Secondly
,
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some
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famous
hotspots can attract the number of tourists to visit countries, which can
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bring
an amount of income for local
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government
.
Hence
, it
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brings
the high demand for job opportunities in travel industries, such restaurants, hotels and travel
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spots
, which
also
boosts the national economy.

In terms of the solution of over exploiting urban cities, the issue could
be addressed
by
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governments
introducing new laws in order to restrict private firms
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so
as not to over operate. This might
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reduce
the degradation of the environment from industrial pollution that
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helps
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people
still
having peaceful places to visit and enjoy. For individuals to tackle this problem is to be aware of the hygiene of public
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areas
,
in particular
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some
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main
hot
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spots
. To do
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so
,
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people
are likely to sustain the beauty of
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natural
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spots
and
also
give
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next
generation better surroundings.

In conclusion
, preserving
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natural
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areas
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brings
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many
benefits to our
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lives
, such as providing a better environment for our
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next
generation and attract
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many
more tourists to visit countries.
Thus
,
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governments
and individuals play an
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important
part of role to do
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so
. The solution could be for
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governments
to introduce new regulations to limit firms operating
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natural
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spots
and for individuals to appreciate the hygiene of public
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areas
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Do memories hinder or help people in their effort to learn from the past andsucceed in the present? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on thisissue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, s v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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