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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.13

Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. 13
Some men and women would argue that teen years are considered to be the happiest time in many people's lives, while others argue that adulthood brings immense happiness even though it comes with many responsibilities. This essay will argue that although teenagers lead a stress-free life, I believe that adult life brings more happiness as they are financially independent. On the one hand, it is thought that people are extremely happy during teenage is because they live a carefree life. That is to say, teenagers are not expected to earn money and pay bills for any expenses, as parents are there to fulfil any of their requirements. As a result, they are free to play, study and enjoy their life without any obligations. For instance, a recent survey by the Times of India revealed that 65% of people feel that teenage years are the best years because they were not worried about anything. However, I believe that teenagers are under constant pressure to excel in academics and secure admission in prestigious colleges. On the other hand, despite adulthood makes people more responsible, people are happiest in this phase of life because they are not dependent on anyone for their finances. In other words, they are earning money, which gives them the freedom to be on their own. Thus, a well-established career allows them to save and splurge money on things they want for themselves and for their family members. To illustrate, recent research revealed that 75% of people were happy when turned adults because they could earn money and buy things they love. I believe this school of thought is preferable to me because a sense of accomplishment is achieved by earning money which makes people happy. In conclusion, although most believe that the teenage years are the happiest years of one's life as they are not under pressure, being adults brings more happiness despite many responsibilities, because people are financially independent.
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responsibilities. This essay will argue that although
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teenagers
lead a
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stress
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life
, I
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believe
that adult
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life
brings more happiness as they are
financially
independent.

On the one hand, it is
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thought
that
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people
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extremely
happy during teenage is
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because
they
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live
a carefree
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life
.
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teenagers
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expected
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money
and pay bills for any expenses, as parents are there to fulfil any of their requirements.
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, they are free to play, study and enjoy their
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life
without any obligations.
For instance
, a recent survey by
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the Times of India
revealed that 65% of
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people
feel that teenage years are the best years
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because
they were not worried about anything.
However
, I
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believe
that
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teenagers
are under constant pressure to excel in academics and secure admission in prestigious colleges.

On the other hand
, despite adulthood
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makes
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people
more responsible,
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people
are happiest in this phase of
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life
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because
they are not dependent on anyone for their finances.
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, they are earning
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money
, which gives them the freedom to be on their
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own
.
Thus
, a well-established career
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allows
them to save and splurge
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money
on things they want for themselves and for their family members. To illustrate, recent research revealed that 75% of
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people
were happy when turned adults
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because
they could earn
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money
and
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buy
things they
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love
. I
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believe
this school of
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thought
is preferable to me
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because
a sense of accomplishment
is achieved
by earning
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money
which
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makes
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people
happy.

In conclusion
, although most
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believe
that the teenage years are the happiest years of one's
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life
as they are not under pressure, being adults brings more happiness despite
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many
responsibilities,
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because
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people
are
financially
independent.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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