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Some people think that the role of parents is to discipline their children and teach them about right and wrong Other people consider that the main responsibility of parents is to nurture their children and provide them with a safe environment to grow up v.1

Some people think that the role of parents is to discipline their children and teach them about right and wrong Other people consider that the main responsibility of parents is to nurture their children and provide them with a safe environment to grow up v. 1
One of the most conspicuous trends of today’s world is a colossal upsurge in the number of people believing that poverty is a pivotal issue globally. There is a wide range of factors accounting for this. On the bright side, the problem can be remedied, provided that some effective measures are taken. There is a deluge of reasons contributing to this soaring concern, including increasing population and limited resources. High head count leads to unemployment, which in turn promotes penury. Limited resources like unavailability of schools in rural areas lead to illiteracy, reducing the chances of getting employed, further contributing to financial issues. Unlike everyday problems, which can be dealt easily, poverty, which is extremely perilous, can lead to an array of issues such as increased crime rate and suicidal incidences. To illustrate, in countries like India, there are villages where mass suicide happens due to unavailability of food or other basic resources to farmers. Thanks to the aforementioned predicaments, it is not only people, but also a society which can suffer immensely. Steps to deal with this problem are many; however the most efficacious ones are in fact not remote or complicated but accessible and practicable. The primary one stems from government’s role here. Ensuring implementation of effective policies by the authorities can help the nation thrive. Local art and culture should be promoted, to create more jobs. Respective organizations can not only initiate campaigns to advertise the benefits of local businesses, but also can arrange for workshops and training sessions for local people to enhance their skill sets. Also, awareness programs to sensitize people about the harmful effects of increased population can be initiated. Only when convergent efforts from all the sectors are ensured, we can expect to see some considerable progress in curbing the issue. To recapitulate, dealing with poverty is one of the most prevalent problems that are being faced by almost all parts of the world today. Nevertheless, the concrete steps discussed above can effectively strengthen the fight against it, alleviate the growing concern and prove to be a panacea.
One of the most conspicuous trends of
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’s world is a colossal upsurge in the number of
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people
believing that poverty is a pivotal issue globally. There is a wide range of factors accounting for this. On the bright side, the
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problem
can
be remedied
, provided that
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some
effective measures
are taken
.

There is a deluge of reasons contributing to this soaring concern, including increasing population and limited resources. High head count leads to unemployment, which in turn promotes penury. Limited resources like unavailability of schools in rural areas lead to illiteracy, reducing the chances of getting employed,
further
contributing to financial issues. Unlike everyday
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problems
, which can
be dealt
easily
, poverty, which is
extremely
perilous, can lead to an array of issues such as increased crime rate and suicidal incidences. To illustrate, in countries like India, there are villages where mass suicide happens due to unavailability of food or other basic resources to farmers. Thanks to the aforementioned predicaments, it is not
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only
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people
,
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also
a society which can suffer
immensely
.

Steps to deal with this
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problem
are
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;
however
the most efficacious ones are in fact not remote or complicated
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but
accessible and practicable. The primary one stems from
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government
’s role here. Ensuring implementation of effective policies by the authorities can
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help
the nation thrive. Local art and culture should
be promoted
, to create more jobs. Respective organizations can not
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only
initiate campaigns to advertise the benefits of local businesses,
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but
also
can arrange for workshops and training sessions for local
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people
to enhance their
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skill
sets.
Also
, awareness programs to sensitize
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people
about the harmful effects of increased population can
be initiated
.
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Only
when convergent efforts from all the sectors
are ensured
, we can
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expect
to
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see
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considerable progress in curbing the issue.

To recapitulate, dealing with poverty is one of the most prevalent
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problems
that are
being faced
by almost all parts of the world
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today
.
Nevertheless
, the concrete steps discussed above can
effectively
strengthen the fight against it, alleviate the growing concern and prove to be a panacea.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the role of parents is to discipline their children and teach them about right and wrong Other people consider that the main responsibility of parents is to nurture their children and provide them with a safe environment to grow up v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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