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Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree? v.4

Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. v. 4
In today’s worlds, everyone wants to be rich enough, and they have their own perception of being rich. Some people believe that being rich person should capable to help other people. I fully agree with this statement and this essay will argue why for rich people, helping others is the most essential thing rather than showing status and getting recognition People with high status and wealth can Contribute to minimize the world’s hunger people index. Recent research from the University of California demonstrate the horrible stats as 30% for world’s population sleeping without having a food. In addition to that they can also help the government bodies or NGO to provide better education and infrastructure to poor people. One of the examples I have recently seen in India, where business tycoon MR RATAN TATA donated 10 % of his earning in NGOs which is further utilized in the establishment of schools and houses for poor people. On the other hand, there are people who believe that being rich is only equivalent in status and show-off. They believe in spending money in parties and pubs where food which can fill the stomach of thousands of people is all goes in wastage. Recently an Incident happens in Australia, where a well-established rich businessman organised a birthday party and food wastage was around 100 thousand Kilograms People should help others if they are capable and rich enough. This essay discussed why and how a person gets the opportunity to support poor and hunger people in order to make them healthy and well educated.
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rich
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perception of being
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rich
.
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Some
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people
believe that being
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rich
person should capable to
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help
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other
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people
. I
fully
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agree
with this statement and this essay will argue why for
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rich
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people
, helping others is the most essential thing
rather
than showing status and getting
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recognition


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People
with high status and wealth can Contribute to minimize the world’s hunger
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people
index. Recent research from the University of California demonstrate the horrible stats as 30% for world’s population sleeping without having
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a food
.
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to that they can
also
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help
the
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government
bodies or NGO to provide better education and infrastructure to poor
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people
. One of the examples I have recently
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seen
in India, where business tycoon MR
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RATAN
TATA donated 10 % of his earning in NGOs which is
further
utilized in the establishment of schools and
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houses
for poor
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people
.

On the
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other
hand, there are
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people
who believe that being
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rich
is
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only
equivalent in status and
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show
-off. They believe in spending money in parties and pubs where food which can
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fill the stomach of
thousands of
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people
is all goes in wastage. Recently an Incident happens in Australia, where a well-established
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rich
businessman
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organised
a birthday party and food wastage was around 100 thousand
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Kilograms


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People
should
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help
others if they are capable and
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rich
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enough
. This essay discussed why and how a person
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gets
the opportunity to support poor and hunger
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people
in order to
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make
them healthy and
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well educated
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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