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Some people think that the most important thing about about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that the most important thing about about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. v. 1
Affluent individuals have a responsibility to help the destitute by donating money, which is an essential part of a wealthy person. It is justifiable to say that the poor people would get a helping hand from the rich. I, holistically, agree with the statement, because if the elites do not donate the impoverishment, who would come forward to aid them. To begin with, it is very atrocious to see one part of the world with wealth, and the other part of the globe is starving for a morsel of food. It is the duty of each wealthy individual to feed the poor who do not have anyone to assist, but the elite class. This is because if people want to eradicate poverty from the world, all the wealthy nations should have to come forward to reduce the rate of poverty. For example, the United Nation and the Red Cross have built up with the wealthiest nations who aid the poorest countries and developing terrains such as Somalia, Nizeria, Congo, to name but a few. As a result, these countries are not only getting food and shelter, but also medicine, which could help them from preventing the fatal diseases like cancer and AIDS. In contrast, if the elite people reckon that it is not their duty to serve the poor nations of the world and nature would heal the pain of the destitute, it is a wrong idea. The reason is that the most significant characteristic of affluents is that they spread humanity rather than the selfish attitude towards the common human begins. For instance, if the wealthiest nations had not assisted the poor individuals in World War 1 and 2, people would not have seen a huge healthy population. Therefore, the sense of humanity arises from bestowing foods, clothes, shelters, et Cetra so that there will be a balance between the rich and the poor, which may, consequently, make the worldd a better place to live. In conclusion, it is an integral part of wealthy individuals to help the people with bread and butter. I, diametrically, second with this viewpoint, as only wealthy persons can serve the poor, but none.
Affluent
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individuals
have a responsibility to
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help
the destitute by donating money, which is an essential
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part
of a
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wealthy
person. It is justifiable to say that the
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poor
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people
would
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get
a helping hand from the rich. I,
holistically
,
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agree
with the statement,
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because
if the elites do not donate the impoverishment, who would
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come
forward to aid them.

To
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begin
with, it is
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very
atrocious to
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see
one
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part
of the
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world
with wealth, and the other
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part
of the globe is starving for a morsel of food. It is the duty of each
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wealthy
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individual
to feed the
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poor
who do not have anyone to assist,
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but
the elite
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class
. This is
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because
if
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people
want to eradicate poverty from the
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world
, all the
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wealthy
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nations
should
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have to
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come
forward to
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reduce
the rate of poverty.
For example
, the United
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Nation
and the Red Cross have built up with the wealthiest
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nations
who aid the poorest countries and developing terrains such as Somalia,
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Nizeria
, Congo, to name
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but
a few.
As a result
, these countries are not
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only
getting food and shelter,
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but
also
medicine, which could
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help
them from preventing the fatal diseases like cancer and AIDS.

In contrast
, if the elite
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people
reckon that it is not their duty to serve the
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poor
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nations
of the
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world
and nature would heal the pain of the destitute, it is a
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wrong
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idea
. The reason is that the most significant characteristic of
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affluents
is that they spread humanity
rather
than the selfish attitude towards the common human
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begins
.
For instance
, if the wealthiest
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nations
had not assisted the
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poor
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individuals
in
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World
War 1 and 2,
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people
would not have
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seen
a huge healthy population.
Therefore
, the sense of humanity arises from bestowing foods, clothes, shelters,
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et
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Cetra
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so
that there will be a balance between the rich and the
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poor
, which may,
consequently
,
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make
the
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worldd
a better place to
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live
.

In conclusion
, it is an integral
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part
of
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wealthy
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individuals
to
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help
the
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people
with bread and butter. I,
diametrically
, second with this viewpoint, as
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only
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wealthy
persons can serve the
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poor
,
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but
none.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that the most important thing about about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
360 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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