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Some people think that the important role of university professors is to do research, others think the main role of them is to educate students. What is your opinion? v.2

Some people think that the important role of university professors is to do research, others think the main role of them is to educate students. What is your opinion? v. 2
University is a special facility in the society that is obligatory to do both research as well as education. Therefore, teaching students and doing research seem to be of the same importance for university professors. Nevertheless, I would like to agree that university professors should put more emphasis on doing research rather than educating students. I would like to give several reasons to substantiate my point of view. University is a facility that has the most abundant resourses and intelligence in the society. Government would allocate quite an amount of money budget to universities every year in order to develop new techniques, medicine as well as academic achievements, which could ultimately benefit their people and lead the society to be more advanced. For example, professors in the medical department not only have smart brains but also have access to research resources like patients' datas from accessory teaching hospital and international journals. So they must not turn their back on these previliges and devote themselves into teaching students. They must spend more time in research than education. I don' t mean that university professors should spend their time and energy totally on research. On the other hand, they still have to take care of their students because they are under a educational facility eventually. Since university is a place so unique apart from other educational facilities like high schools and elementary schools, people should not expect professors to teach their students in exactly the same way as teachers do in other schools mentioned above. Moreover, college students are aready adults who can take care of themselves. Therefore, university professors should do less teaching but do more leading and questioning jobs. They should rather play the role of opening the door of knowledge for students. Students can study by themselves. Owing to the fact that university professors pocess so many resources and knowledge, and university students can be more independent in studying, university professors should dive into research rather than teaching.
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is a special facility in the society
that is
obligatory to do both
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research
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as well as
education.
Therefore
,
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teaching
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students
and doing
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research
seem to be of the same importance for
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university
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professors
.
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, I would like to
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agree
that
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university
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professors
should put more emphasis on doing
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research
rather
than educating
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students
. I would like to give several reasons to substantiate my point of view.

University is a facility that has the most abundant
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resourses
and intelligence in the society.
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Government
would allocate quite an amount of money budget to
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universities
every year in order to develop new techniques, medicine
as well
as academic achievements, which could
ultimately
benefit their
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people
and lead the society to be more advanced.
For example
,
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professors
in the medical department not
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only
have smart brains
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but
also
have access to
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research
resources like
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patients&
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datas
from accessory
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teaching
hospital and international journals.
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So
they
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must
not turn their back on these
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previliges
and devote themselves into
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teaching
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students
. They
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must
spend more time in
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research
than education.

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university
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professors
should spend their time and energy
totally
on
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research
.
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, they
still
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have to
take care of their
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students
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because
they are under
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a
educational facility
eventually
. Since
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university
is a place
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so
unique apart from other educational facilities like high schools and elementary schools,
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people
should not
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expect
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professors
to teach their
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students
in exactly the same way as teachers do in other schools mentioned above.
Moreover
, college
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students
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are aready
adults who can take care of themselves.
Therefore
,
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university
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professors
should do less
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teaching
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but
do more leading and questioning jobs. They should
rather
play the role of opening the door of knowledge for
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students
.
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Students
can study by themselves.

Owing to the fact that
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university
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professors
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pocess
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so
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many
resources and knowledge, and
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university
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students
can be more independent in studying,
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university
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professors
should dive into
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research
rather
than
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teaching
.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that the important role of university professors is to do research, others think the main role of them is to educate students. What is your opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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