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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view? v.5

Group of people believe that, compare to other aspects, the government using money on developing arts. Compare to arts, providing education for the children is most important thing. It will improve the quality of life. Student or children's are the basictones of our country. Through the proper education they can easily develope our country. So utilise more money for developing education sector. for example, spent the money for build a government schools and give the students free educational materials. So it will help to build up a developed country. Similarly, utilise this money for building health care industry. Without good health we can not survive in society. This is the most and primary thing in our life. So the government can easily deposit the money for developing the primary health care center. For instance, the people who are ill they can treat their problems with cheap amount. It will decrease our mortality rate. On the other hand, arts also represending our culture and traditions. In our society presence of art college are few. so we can utilize this money for developing arts but without education and health we can not improve our creativities and skills. So I strongly say that utilizes more money on health and education rather than spending it on arts.
Group of
people
believe that, compare to other aspects, the
government
using
money
on
developing
arts
. Compare to
arts
, providing
education
for the children is
most
important
thing. It will
improve
the quality of life. Student or children's are the
basictones
of our country. Through the proper
education
they can
easily
develope
our country.
So
utilise
more
money
for
developing
education
sector.
for
example, spent the
money
for build a
government
schools and give the students free educational materials.
So
it will
help
to build up a
developed country
.
Similarly
,
utilise
this
money
for building
health
care industry. Without
good
health
we can not survive in society. This is the most and primary thing in our life.
So
the
government
can
easily
deposit the
money
for
developing
the primary
health
care center.
For instance
, the
people
who are ill they can treat their problems with
cheap
amount. It will decrease our mortality rate.
On the other hand
,
arts
also
represending
our culture and traditions. In our society presence of
art
college are few.
so
we can
utilize
this
money
for
developing
arts
but
without
education
and
health
we can not
improve
our
creativities
and
skills
.
So
I
strongly
say that
utilizes
more
money
on
health
and
education
rather
than spending it on
arts
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that government is wasting money on arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere

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