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Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree or agree with this view?

Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. v. 3
It is important to consider how a state should allocate its resources towards the overall betterment of the society. Some people believe that an administration spending money on the arts is a waste and it should be spent somewhere which is better for the society. While I disagree that the arts is a waste of money, I do feel that the welfare of the public should be the priority when it comes to the allocation of resources. To begin with, arts is an essential part of culture which allows people not only to express their creativity, but also their opinions. This expression of ideas fosters an For example healthy society which is crucial in the progress of a country. For example, arts institutions organizing different events provide a great opportunity to artists not only to share their ideas with the public, but also to shed light on the critical social issues. Therefore, a state ought to support the arts by putting in some resources to it. However, besides spending on the arts, government should not forget to fulfil the basic public needs. It is occasionally observed, especially in the developing countries that governments often divert their resource toward projects which have nothing to do with the welfare of the general population. For instance, In Pakistan, the provincial government of Sindh, spent extravagantly over the renovation of the provincial assembly building while several people in rural areas of the province are disenfranchised of basic health facilities. In conclusion, while others people opinion may vary, in my view, there is no waste of money in supporting the arts, but the welfare of the public should be the top priority of the state when it comes to allocation of resource
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important
to consider how a state should allocate its resources towards the
overall
betterment of the society.
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Some
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people
believe that an administration spending money on the
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arts
is a waste and it should
be spent
somewhere which is better for the society. While I disagree that the
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arts
is a waste of money, I do feel that the welfare of the
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public
should be the priority when it
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comes
to the allocation of resources.

To
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begin
with,
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arts
is an essential part of culture which
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allows
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people
not
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only
to express their creativity,
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but
also
their opinions. This expression of
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ideas
fosters
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healthy society which is crucial in the progress of a country.
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,
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arts
institutions organizing
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different
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events
provide a great opportunity to artists not
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only
to share their
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ideas
with the
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public
,
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but
also
to shed light on the critical social issues.
Therefore
, a state ought to support the
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arts
by putting in
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some
resources to it.

However
,
besides
spending on the
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arts
,
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government
should not forget to fulfil the basic
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public
needs. It is
occasionally
observed,
especially
in the
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developing countries
that
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governments
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often
divert their
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resource
toward projects which have nothing to do with the welfare of the general population.
For instance
, In Pakistan, the provincial
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government
of
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Sindh
, spent
extravagantly
over the renovation of the provincial assembly building while several
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people
in rural areas of the province
are disenfranchised
of basic health facilities.

In conclusion
, while others
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people
opinion may vary, in my view, there is no waste of money in supporting the
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arts
,
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but
the welfare of the
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public
should be the top priority of the state when it
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comes
to allocation of
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resource
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IELTS essay Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere.

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