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Some people say that we do not need printed news paper anymore. To what extent do yo agree or disagree? State your opinion. v.1

Some people say that we do not need printed news paper anymore. State your opinion. v. 1
Advancement of technology has significantly changed the way people read news. Some people are of the opinion that newspaper is no longer required. In my opinion, there are far more advantages of online news than the contemporary papers as they are more convenient and efficient source of information. This essay shall delve into both the views and will reasonably lead to a pragmatic conclusion. The Newspaper has lost its essence in the modern society because electronic medium has various benefits as compared to traditional paperback news. To begin with, online news is more convenient as it can be accessed from anywhere anytime. Furthermore, it is free of charge as compared to printed newspaper for which one need to pay and Most importantly, people favour online news over the traditional papers because they have become more concerned of their surroundings and environment and online news is clean and environmentally friendly source of information whereas, printed dailys leads to deforestation which eventually affect our ecosystem. Therefore, electronic medium of news is much more preferred over conventional paper based news. However, it cannot be denied that certain section of people still buy newspaper because they have embedded the habit of reading journals which they do not want to change specially the older generation and moreover, they are not well equipped with the latest technology. Consequently, they buy a newspaper. To conclude, online news has become the preferred source of information for people as it is much more convenient and efficient as compared to papers and in the future they will be replaced by internet news.
Advancement of technology has
significantly
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changed
the way
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people
read
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news
.
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Some
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people
are of the opinion that
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newspaper
is no longer required. In my opinion, there are far more advantages of
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online
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news
than the contemporary papers as they are more convenient and efficient source of information. This essay shall delve into both the views and will
reasonably
lead to a pragmatic conclusion.

The
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Newspaper
has lost its essence in the modern society
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because
electronic medium has various benefits as compared to traditional paperback
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news
. To
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begin
with,
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online
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news
is more convenient as it can
be accessed
from anywhere anytime.
Furthermore
, it is free of charge as compared to printed
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newspaper
for which one need to pay and Most
importantly
,
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people
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favour
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online
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news
over the traditional papers
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because
they have become more concerned of their surroundings and environment and
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online
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news
is clean and
environmentally
friendly source of information whereas, printed
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dailys
leads to deforestation which
eventually
affect our ecosystem.
Therefore
, electronic medium of
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news
is much more preferred over conventional paper based news.

However
, it cannot
be denied
that certain section of
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people
still
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buy
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newspaper
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because
they have embedded the habit of reading journals which they do not want to
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change
specially
the older generation and
moreover
, they are not
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well equipped
with the latest technology.
Consequently
, they
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buy
a newspaper.

To conclude
,
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online
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news
has become the preferred source of information for
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people
as it is much more convenient and efficient as compared to papers and in the future they will
be replaced
by internet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that we do not need printed news paper anymore. State your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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