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Some people think that the development of technology helps to reduce crime, while other people think that it encourages crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.3

Some people think that the development of technology helps to reduce crime, while other people think that it encourages crime. 3
It is argued by some people that the advancements in techology have contributed to a reduction in crimes, while others are of the view that modern techology propel people to commit crimes. Although there are new forms of criminal acts due to recent technology, I believe that the development of techological helps to prevent crimes and easily apprehend criminals. On the one hand, some people think that the new technologies have increased the modes of crimes today. Unlike in the past when criminals operate with arms to threaten and subdue their victims but still face many challenges, they now use mobiles devices, computers and the internet to break laws in the comfort of their homes. For instance, the surge in cases of fraud in Nigeria has been attributed to the wide use of computers and internet by the youths in the country. Thus, there have been an increase in various crimes as a result of technological advancements. On the other hand, some people believe that recent technological developments help to catch both would-be criminals and the law breakers. Through the use of surveillance cameras and online devices, law enforcers now have live feedbacks on crimes within their domains, which has enables them arrest persons planning to involve in crime and criminals. For example, the concept of Pre-crime Surveillance has prevented serious crimes in countries such as the UK and France. Therefore, some people with the intend to break laws have been rehabilitated, law breakers promptly arrested and more people have been protected through modern techology. In conclusion, despite the fact that technological development has increased the modes of crime, however, it has helped to quickly catch criminals and prevent serious crimes. On the balance, I believe that it helps to reduce crimes.
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that the advancements in
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techology
have contributed to a reduction in
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crimes
, while others are of the view that modern
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techology
propel
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people
to commit
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crimes
. Although there are new forms of
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criminal
acts due to recent technology, I believe that the development of
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techological
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helps
to
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prevent
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crimes
and
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apprehend criminals.

On the one hand,
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people
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think
that the new technologies have increased the modes of
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crimes
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today
. Unlike in the past when
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criminals
operate with arms to threaten and subdue their victims
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still
face
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challenges, they
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now
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use
mobiles devices, computers and the internet to break
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laws
in the comfort of their homes.
For instance
, the surge in cases of fraud in Nigeria has
been attributed
to the wide
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use
of computers and internet by the youths in the country.
Thus
, there have been an increase in various
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crimes
as a result
of technological advancements.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
believe that recent technological developments
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help
to catch both would-be
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criminals
and the
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law
breakers. Through the
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use
of surveillance cameras and online devices,
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law
enforcers
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now
have
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live
feedbacks on
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crimes
within their domains, which has enables them arrest persons planning to involve in
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crime
and
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criminals
.
For example
, the concept of
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Pre-crime
Surveillance has
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prevented
serious
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crimes
in countries such as the UK and France.
Therefore
,
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some
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people
with the
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intend
to break
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laws
have
been rehabilitated
,
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law
breakers
promptly
arrested and more
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people
have
been protected
through modern
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techology
.

In conclusion
, despite the fact that technological development has increased the modes of
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crime
,
however
, it has
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helped
to
quickly
catch
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criminals
and
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prevent
serious
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crimes
. On the balance, I believe that it
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helps
to
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reduce
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crimes
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay Some people think that the development of technology helps to reduce crime, while other people think that it encourages crime. 3

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