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Some people think that the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.7

Some people think that the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 7
Environmental pollution has been a major concern in today’s society, and to mitigate this problem some people argued that the best way to solve the global environmental issues is to raise the price of oil to deal with the problem. While I believe that it may help to improve the environment matter to a certain extent, other steps are essential to face the issue. To begin with, increasing the value of petrol can help reduce environmental pollution to some degree. This is because the excessive use of the vehicle produces the most amount of carbon dioxide to the atmosphere which is detrimental to the environment. If the price of oil is increased, individual people will stop using their cars to reduce the cost. However, the rise in fuel cost always determines the market prices of all goods and this increasing price of consumers hit most of the middle class and poor families. I believe that the increase in the value of fuel will not stop environmental pollution. On the other hand, governments can take other measures to deal with the issue. Firstly, governments can increase funding to find an alternative source of energy such as solar panels, wind power. To illustrate this the CEO of Tesla and Solar Energy "Elan Mask" said, that if the government funds his project of solar panels, he will completely able to remove the dependency on non-renewable resources like coal and petrol. And also solar power in the USA has proven its efficiency in power production. Secondly, the government can encourage more people to switch to electric cars to protect the environment. In conclusion, I believe that to enhance the charge of fuel is not an appropriate way to solve the environmental problem. Renewable energy sources are better alternatives to deal with this issue, and authority can motivate people to use an electric car.
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Environmental
pollution has been a major concern in
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today
’s society, and to mitigate this problem
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some
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people
argued that the best way to solve the global
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environmental
issues is to raise the
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price
of oil to deal with the problem. While I believe that it may
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help
to
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improve
the environment matter to a certain extent, other steps are essential to face the issue.

To
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begin
with, increasing the value of petrol can
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help
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reduce
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environmental
pollution to
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some
degree. This is
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because
the excessive
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use
of the vehicle produces the most amount of carbon dioxide to the atmosphere which is detrimental to the environment. If the
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price
of oil
is increased
, individual
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people
will
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stop
using their cars to
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reduce
the cost.
However
, the rise in fuel cost always determines the market
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prices
of all
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goods
and this increasing
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price
of consumers hit most of the middle
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class
and poor families. I believe that the increase in the value of fuel will not
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stop
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environmental
pollution.

On the other hand
,
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governments
can take other measures to deal with the issue.
Firstly
,
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governments
can increase funding to find an alternative source of energy such as
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solar
panels, wind power. To illustrate this the CEO of Tesla and
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Solar
Energy
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"
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Elan
Mask
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"
said, that if the
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government
funds his project of
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solar
panels, he will completely able to remove the dependency on non-renewable resources like coal and petrol. And
also
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solar
power in the USA has proven its efficiency in power production.
Secondly
, the
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government
can encourage more
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people
to switch to electric cars to protect the environment.

In conclusion
, I believe that to enhance the charge of fuel is not an appropriate way to solve the
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environmental
problem. Renewable energy sources are better alternatives to deal with this issue, and authority can motivate
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people
to
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use
an electric car.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
9
Overall Band Score
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