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Some people think that the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 2
In this modern century, environmental issues have become a crucial and a major concern in today’s society. Increased fuel consumption and industrial countries have made many problems. Some people consider increasing the price of fuel will be the prominent solution. In my opinion, this is right to some extend but I do not agree with this because it may cause some other problems. Firstly, it is true that raising price will help to reduce the environmental pollution and individuals may use their cars less. But, this wouldn’t be a good solution because approximately everything runs and works with oil energy like transportation system and some industrial instruments. As a result, it will affect the products’ cost or even unnecessary things. Also some people may not overcome the life expenses. Hence, the government, economy will be affected. Secondly, increasing fuel cost will not just disturb the economy, but also it will cause protest and make people frustrated because they can’t afford the prices. So government should find other solutions for instance, informing society using less oil energy leads to less environmental pollution by advertisements or short explanations on social media and encourage people to use transportation systems instead of their own cars, and use more wind, solar and water energy instead of non-renewable recourses for example for example change some industrial instruments to low energy users. In a conclusion, global environmental issues are very important and its problems won’t be solved just by raising petrol prices. I strongly believe that government should seek for more possible options to apply to the society.
In this modern century,
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environmental
issues have become a crucial and a major concern in
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today
’s society. Increased fuel consumption and industrial countries have made
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many
problems.
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Some
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people
consider increasing the
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price
of fuel will be the prominent solution. In my opinion, this is right to
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some
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extend
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but
I do not
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agree
with this
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because
it may cause
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some
other problems.

Firstly
, it is true that raising
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price
will
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help
to
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reduce
the
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environmental
pollution and individuals may
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use
their cars less.
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But
, this wouldn’t be a
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good
solution
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because
approximately everything runs and works with oil
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energy
like transportation system and
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some
industrial instruments.
As a result
, it will affect the products’ cost or even unnecessary things.
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Also
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some
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people
may not overcome the life expenses.
Hence
, the
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government
, economy will be
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affected
.

Secondly
, increasing fuel cost will not
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just
disturb the economy,
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but
also
it will cause protest and
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make
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people
frustrated
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because
they can’t afford the
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prices
.
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So
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government
should find other solutions
for instance
, informing society using less oil
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energy
leads to less
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environmental
pollution by advertisements or short explanations on social media and encourage
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people
to
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use
transportation systems
instead
of their
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own
cars, and
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use
more wind, solar and water
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energy
instead
of non-renewable recourses
for example
for example
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change
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some
industrial instruments to low
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energy
users.

In a conclusion, global
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environmental
issues are
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very
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important
and its problems won’t
be solved
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just
by raising petrol
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prices
. I
strongly
believe that
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government
should seek for more possible options to apply to the society.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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