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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. v. 1
Many people lost their lives due to motor vehicle accidents annually; therefore, it is necessary for governments worldwide to apply proper strategies to prevent car accidents. Some people suggest that governments should increase the minimum legal age to obtain the legal drive license in order to enhance road safety. I partially agree with this suggestion and the essay will discuss my view. To begin with, increasing the minimum age to be eligible to obtain a drive license is crucial to promote safe driving worldwide. Firstly, the proper mental capacity for driving is one of the necessary elements for safety driving. Teenagers tend to have fragile mental capacities which make them high-risk drivers. Only when they mature enough and have better capacities to control their mood, they are allowed to drive independently. Moreover, with the industrialization, road conditions tend to become more complex over the world, especially in the inner cities which contribute to the challenges of driving. The complicated and tough driving environment requires all drivers’ to stay calm during driving. It is challenging for teenagers to stay calm during urgent situations as driving. For example, in Canada, teenagers are allowed to drive legally at the age of 16 years old with restriction. However, this age teenagers remain lack of logic thinking capacity and may also put them at high risk to involve into car accidents. Therefore, increasing the age of 18 years old should be considered in Canada. In addition, nowadays, teenagers face more challenges during their daily lives due to the more complicated living environment. They tend to be vulnerable to nurture negative habits such drinking or doing drugs before driving, This may be resulted from that they are lack of proper logical thinking skills before they mature enough to make right decisions. Moreover, mental health issues are much common among contemporary population, including teenagers and also causes detrimental efficacy to their fitness for driving, especially for younger ones. Finally, the minimum legal age should be various in terms of individual national living environment. For example, in Chinese metropolitans, being 18 years old is a muss standard for the youth to attend driving school and test because of Chinese complex and crowed living environment. If the youth has suffered from mental health issues, the proper age that allows them to drive legally should be increased in order to protect the public. In conclusion, in order to keep motor vehicle accident as low as possible to promote safe driving, setting proper legal age of the youth for legal driving is crucial. The governments around the world should establish a proper legal age for the youth’s qualification of driving. At least 18 years old is a reasonable age for the health youth; while, for the ones with mental health issues, the legal ages to drive should be increased due to the above reasons. Proper driving rules will enhance national happiness of the public.
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lost their
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accidents
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governments
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suggest that
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governments
should increase the minimum
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age
to obtain the
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drive
license in order to enhance road safety. I
partially
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agree
with this suggestion and the essay will discuss my view.

To
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begin
with, increasing the minimum
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age
to be eligible to obtain a
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license is crucial to promote safe
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driving
worldwide.
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proper
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mental
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enough
and have better
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capacities
to control their mood, they are
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allowed
to
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drive
independently
.
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, with the industrialization, road conditions tend to become more complex over the world,
especially
in the inner cities which contribute to the challenges of
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driving
. The complicated and tough
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driving
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environment
requires all drivers’ to stay calm during
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driving
. It is challenging for
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teenagers
to stay calm during urgent situations as
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driving
.
For example
, in Canada,
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teenagers
are
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allowed
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drive
legally
at the
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age
of 16 years
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old
with restriction.
However
, this
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age
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teenagers
remain lack of logic thinking
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capacity
and may
also
put them at high
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risk
to involve into car
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accidents
.
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, increasing the
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age
of 18 years
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old
should
be considered
in Canada.

In addition
, nowadays,
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teenagers
face more challenges during their daily
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lives
due to the more complicated living
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environment
. They tend to be vulnerable to nurture
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negative
habits such drinking or doing drugs
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before
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driving
, This may
be resulted
from that they are lack of
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proper
logical thinking
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skills
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before
they mature
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enough
to
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make
right decisions.
Moreover
,
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mental
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health
issues are much common among contemporary population, including
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teenagers
and
also
causes detrimental efficacy to their fitness for
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driving
,
especially
for younger ones.
Finally
, the minimum
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legal
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age
should be various in terms of individual national living
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environment
.
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, in Chinese metropolitans, being 18 years
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old
is a muss standard for the
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youth
to attend
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driving
school and
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test
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because
of Chinese complex and crowed living
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environment
. If the
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youth
has suffered from
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mental
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health
issues, the
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proper
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age
that
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allows
them to
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drive
legally
should
be increased
in order to protect the public.

In conclusion
, in order to
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keep
motor vehicle
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accident
as low as possible to promote safe
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driving
, setting
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proper
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legal
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age
of the
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youth
for
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legal
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driving
is crucial. The
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governments
around the world should establish a
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proper
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legal
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age
for the
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youth’s
qualification of
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driving
. At least 18 years
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old
is a reasonable
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age
for the
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health
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youth
; while, for the ones with
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mental
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health
issues, the
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legal
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ages
to
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should
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due to the above reasons.
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Proper
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driving
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rules
will enhance national happiness of the public.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
81Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
483 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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