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Some people think that teenagers should follow the example of older people. Others think that it is natural for teenagers to challenge what older people say. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

Some people think that teenagers should follow the example of older people. Others think that it is natural for teenagers to challenge what older people say. v. 3
Nowadays, the life is evolving and our demands are changing dramatically. While many believe that teenaers should keep an eye on the older people steps, others argue it is normal they will question what older people say. In my opinion, teeagers pursue their own dreams which led them to not follow older people exaples. This essay will discuss both sides of the arguments and provide a conclusion with my personal point of view. To begin with, there are several reasons why many people claim that the teeagers should follow older people models. Firstly, the older people have learnt from their own experiences and tries, and this has raised the level of judgement and wisdom. These experieces could give an added value to the younger generation by advising them with the consequences of important life decisions. For example, some of the teenagers are following the footprint of older politics people to gain success. Secondly, our traditions are the most valuale inputs to our life, and it should be passed to the next geneations. Therefore, the younger generations should consider older people as a prove example in following them to maintain these traditions. Furthermore, as our life is changing due to many factors, the teenagers should naturally challenge the older people say. To commence with, the demand of the mdern life is caging and the new experiences should be learnt. If the teenagers did not condct their own call in this life, they will not gain the required knowledge. For instance, the demands have been developed in the recent age and the new geerations should evolve with them from their own experiences. Moreover, the teenagers are having a different input for some points which they it should be done differently in these days. Accordingly, they need to apply an etra step in the experiment and learn from the outcome. To sum up, following older people is useful, but it is not manatory to be applicable in all the cases. I profoundly beieve that the younger generation should challenge older people`s experiences and implement what is best for them to cope in the modern life.
Nowadays, the
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life
is evolving and our demands are changing
dramatically
. While
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believe that
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teenaers
should
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keep
an eye on the
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older
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people
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steps
, others argue it is normal they will question what
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older
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people
say. In my opinion,
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teeagers
pursue their
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dreams which led them to not follow
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older
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people
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exaples
. This essay will discuss both sides of the arguments and provide a conclusion with my personal point of view.

To
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begin
with, there are several reasons why
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many
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people
claim that the
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teeagers
should follow
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older
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people
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models
.
Firstly
, the
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older
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people
have
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learnt
from their
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own
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experiences
and tries, and this has raised the level of judgement and wisdom. These
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experieces
could give an
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added
value to the younger generation by advising them with the consequences of
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important
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life
decisions.
For example
,
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some of the
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teenagers
are following the footprint of
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older
politics
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people
to gain success.
Secondly
, our traditions are the most
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valuale
inputs to our
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life
, and it should
be passed
to the
next
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geneations
.
Therefore
, the younger generations should consider
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older
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people
as a
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prove
example in following them to maintain these traditions.

Furthermore
, as our
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life
is changing due to
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many
factors, the
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teenagers
should
naturally
challenge the
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older
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people
say. To commence with, the demand of the
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mdern
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life
is caging and the new
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experiences
should be
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learnt
. If the
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teenagers
did not
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condct
their
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own
call in this
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life
, they will not gain the required knowledge.
For instance
, the demands have
been developed
in the recent age and the new
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geerations
should evolve with them from their
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own
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experiences
.
Moreover
, the
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teenagers
are having a
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different
input for
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some
points which they it should
be done
differently
in these days.
Accordingly
, they need to apply an
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etra
step in the experiment and learn from the outcome.

To sum up, following
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people
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is
useful,
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it is not
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manatory
to be applicable in all the cases. I
profoundly
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beieve
that the younger generation should challenge
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older
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people`s
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experiences
and implement what is best for them to cope in the modern
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life
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that teenagers should follow the example of older people. Others think that it is natural for teenagers to challenge what older people say. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
6.5
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