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Some people think that teenage years are the happiest times of most people's life. Others think that adult life brings more happiness in spite of greater responsibilities. discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that teenage years are the happiest times of most people's life. Others think that adult life brings more happiness in spite of greater responsibilities. v. 1
A part of society believes that teenage is the best time of life for many people whereas the opposite group are of opinion that adulthood offers more happiness along with certain responsibilities as usual. Reduced restrictions for their activities and less responsibility are the two main reasons for the portion of public to believe that the teenage life as a wonderful life. Experiencing new stages of life and making matured decisions make people to feel that adult life offers more happiness and responsibility. This essay will discuss both the views, and in my opinion, I believe that both the ages of life has their own value, and both brings happiness which an individual will enjoy in a different way. The vital reasons for why the society believes that the teenage life as a best are less restrictions to things they do and they do not have responsibility as the adults would have. Firstly, in this modern days parents will be friendly with their children when they reach a certain age where this friendly relationship between parents and teenagers makes them to feel free to involve in any activity or provides them freedom to enjoy their life. By making use of that freedom college students will spend enough time with their friends that spending with their family and also go for parties, movies, and night outs and enjoy their life to the peaks because they will not have any conditions put up by their parents. To give a clear example, this generation children does not like when their parents restrict them for doing things, therefore, every adult prefer to stay like a friend with their children and provide full freedom to stay happily in life. Furthermore, during the student life, most of the students will not have any responsibility other than their studies. They will be totally dependent on their father or mother for their academic fees and personal care. They will not have any tension regarding money commitments like their father have and in relation to their food usually mothers will take care of it therefore teenagers would be free birds during their age. Overall freedom and reduced responsibility are the vital components for teenagers to be more happier in their age. On the other hand, even though adulthood have some responsibilities it also offers certain benefits such as experience of new phases of life along with taking right decision at right time makes adults to lead a happy life. To begin with every person will pass two stages in adulthood as a husband or wife and as a parent. These stages are vital because it completely changes a person’s life and bring new dream, happiness and responsibility. As a partner it is a principal requirement to keep our partner happy and share equal duties and need to take care of each other. When it comes to parenthood, motherhood is a blessing given by god to a female because during pregnancy time she will carry her baby for nine months and enjoy that experience which will be given by her baby before it is born. Parents see themselves each other together in their kid which seems to be a beautiful part of life and the most happiest part in life. In addition, maturity comes after a certain age for people usually during their adult age. This is a perfect age for people to make decisions without others help because of the maturity they will have makes them to decide what is right and wrong and also to make decisions about their career. For instance, parents will decide the career of their children because of the maturity and life experience they have their decision will always be correct. However, new experiences of life and matured thinking makes adult age to feel more happy about that phase of life. In conclusion, as far as I am concerned, I believe that both the teenage and matured age will give rise to happiness in their own way like enjoying life with friends and commitments or tensions like how the parents will have are the advantages that the teenagers will enjoy whereas the adults by sharing life with one another and by giving birth they experience new phases of life.
A part of society
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believes
that teenage is the best
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time
of
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life
for
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many
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people
whereas the opposite group are of opinion that adulthood offers more
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happiness
along with
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certain
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responsibilities
as usual.
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Reduced
restrictions for their activities and less
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responsibility
are the two main reasons for the portion of public to
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believe
that the teenage
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life
as a wonderful
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life
. Experiencing
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new
stages of
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life
and making matured
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decisions
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make
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people
to feel that adult
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life
offers more
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happiness
and
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responsibility
. This essay will discuss both the views, and in my opinion, I
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believe
that both the
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ages
of
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life
has their
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own
value, and both brings
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happiness
which an individual will
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enjoy
in a
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different
way.

The vital reasons for why the society
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believes
that the teenage
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life
as
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a
best are
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less
restrictions to things they
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do and
they do not have
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responsibility
as the
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adults
would have.
Firstly
, in this modern days
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parents
will be friendly with their
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children
when they reach a
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certain
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age
where this friendly relationship between
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parents
and
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teenagers
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makes
them to feel free to involve in any activity or provides them
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freedom
to
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enjoy
their
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life
. By making
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use
of that
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freedom
college students will spend
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enough
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time
with their friends that spending with their family and
also
go for parties, movies, and night outs and
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enjoy
their
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life
to the peaks
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because
they will not have any conditions put up by their
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parents
. To give a
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clear
example, this generation
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children
does not like when their
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parents
restrict them for doing things,
therefore
, every adult prefer to stay like a friend with their
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children
and provide full
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freedom
to stay
happily
in
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life
.
Furthermore
, during the student
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life
, most of the students will not have any
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responsibility
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other
than their studies. They will be
totally
dependent on their father or mother for their academic fees and personal care. They will not have any tension regarding money commitments like their father have and in relation to their food
usually
mothers will take care of it
therefore
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teenagers
would be free birds during their
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age
.
Overall
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freedom
and
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reduced
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responsibility
are the vital components for
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teenagers
to be
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more happier
in their age.

On the
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other
hand,
even though
adulthood have
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some
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responsibilities
it
also
offers
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certain
benefits such as
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experience
of
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new
phases of
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life
along with taking right
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decision
at right
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time
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makes
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adults
to lead a happy
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life
. To
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begin
with every person will pass two stages in adulthood as a husband or wife and as a
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parent
. These stages are vital
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because
it completely
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changes
a person’s
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life
and bring
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new
dream,
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happiness
and
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responsibility
. As a partner it is a principal requirement to
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keep
our partner happy and share equal duties and need to take care of each
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other
. When it
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comes
to parenthood, motherhood is a blessing
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given
by god to a female
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because
during pregnancy
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time
she will carry her baby for nine months and
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enjoy
that
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experience
which will be
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given
by her baby
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before
it
is born
.
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Parents
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see
themselves each
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other
together in their kid which seems to be a
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beautiful
part of
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life
and the
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most happiest
part in
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life
.
In addition
, maturity
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comes
after a
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certain
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age
for
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people
usually
during their adult
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age
. This is a perfect
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age
for
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people
to
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make
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decisions
without others
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help
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because
of the maturity they will have
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makes
them to decide what is right and
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wrong
and
also
to
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make
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decisions
about their career.
For instance
,
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parents
will decide the career of their
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children
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because
of the maturity and
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life
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experience
they have their
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decision
will always be correct.
However
,
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new
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experiences
of
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life
and matured thinking
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makes
adult
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age
to feel more happy about that phase of life.

In conclusion
, as far as I
am concerned
, I
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believe
that both the teenage and matured
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age
will give rise to
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happiness
in their
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own
way like enjoying
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life
with friends and commitments or tensions like how the
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parents
will have
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are
the advantages that the
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teenagers
will
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enjoy
whereas the
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adults
by sharing
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life
with one another and by giving birth they
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experience
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new
phases of
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life
.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
113Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that teenage years are the happiest times of most people's life. Others think that adult life brings more happiness in spite of greater responsibilities. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
705 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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