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Some people think that teachers should be able to ask disruptive children to leave the class. Do you think is it the best way to deal with a disruptive child in the classroom? What other solutions are there? v.2

Some people think that teachers should be able to ask disruptive children to leave the class. Do you think is it the best way to deal with a disruptive child in the classroom? What other solutions are there? v. 2
Acquisition of knowledge is the only purpose for students to come to school. Some students break silence in the classrooms and disrupt their teachers from teaching. This way the other pupils also suffer. This leads many to think that educators must be allowed to send such students out of the classroom. I think that this is not a good way to deal with them. To commence with, most of the students indulge in such behaviour due to boredom of lessons. For instance, many students start playing with paper planes when they get bored of studies, which is disrupting for teachers to continue. At the young age, they are not able to understand the importance of education. If the teachers ask disruptive students to leave the classroom, then they might enjoy as they do not have to learn the lessons now. Overall, this is the loss of the future generation and the nation. Furthermore, they might start doing this consistently to avoid learning at the school. According to multiple psychological surveys, youngsters interrupt the lecture in a group. Hence, the first step an educator can take is to set up the seating arrangement to disperse the group. This will reduce interruptions from students. As a next step, they can make them actively participate in the class. For example, asking kids to read out the textbook or to solve a question on the board can involve them in the ongoing lessons and decrease the interruptions. Lastly, to punish pupils for their interruptions, they can ask them to stand in the last row of the classroom. This way teachers can make them attend the lectures and punish them. It should be compulsory for these students to attend the morality class. To conclude, in my opinion, punishing kids for their disruptive behaviour by asking them to leave the lecture hall is not a good idea to deal with them. Instead, steps such as dispersing the group, making them attend morality class etc. , should be taken.
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students
break silence in the classrooms and disrupt their
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from teaching. This way the other pupils
also
suffer. This leads
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that educators
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out of the classroom. I
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that this is not a
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good
way to deal with them.

To commence with, most of the
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students
indulge in such
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behaviour
due to boredom of lessons.
For instance
,
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many
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students
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playing with paper
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planes
when they
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bored of
studies, which is disrupting for
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teachers
to continue. At the young age, they are not able to understand the importance of education. If the
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teachers
ask disruptive
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students
to
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leave
the classroom, then they might enjoy as they do not
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have to
learn the lessons
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now
.
Overall
, this is the loss of the future generation and the nation.
Furthermore
, they might
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start
doing this
consistently
to avoid learning at the school.

According to multiple psychological surveys, youngsters interrupt the lecture in a group.
Hence
, the
first
step an educator can take is to set up the seating arrangement to disperse the group. This will
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reduce
interruptions from
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students
. As a
next
step, they can
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make
them
actively
participate in the
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class
.
For example
, asking kids to read out the textbook or to solve a question on the board can involve them in the ongoing lessons and decrease the interruptions.
Lastly
, to punish pupils for their interruptions, they can ask them to stand in the last row of the classroom. This way
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teachers
can
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make
them attend the lectures and punish them. It should be compulsory for these
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students
to attend the morality
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class
.

To conclude
, in my opinion, punishing kids for their disruptive
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behaviour
by asking them to
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leave
the lecture hall is not a
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good
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idea
to deal with them.
Instead
, steps such as dispersing the group, making them attend morality
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class
etc.
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should
be taken
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that teachers should be able to ask disruptive children to leave the class. Do you think is it the best way to deal with a disruptive child in the classroom? What other solutions are there? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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