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Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion v.11

Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. 11
Road accidents take the lives of many drivers and pedestrians every year. Some argue that the best way to reduce them is to have severe penalties for offending traffic regulations, while others think other solutions may work better. I think, although such punishments are helpful, other measures should be taken alongside them. On the one hand, careless drivers who ignore traffic laws play a major role in many road accidents. For example, some use their mobile phones while driving and do not focus on the road, meaning they would definitely not be able to control their cars in time to avoid accidents. If such drivers know they risk being imprisoned or heavily fined, they will probably be motivated to observe driving regulations more closely. Furthermore, penalising driving offences is the quickest solution since it can be applied immediately and drivers will see the consequences of their faults right away. On the other hand, there are various other means of decreasing the number of traffic accidents. Driving license candidates could be required to sit courses aimed at educating them on the virtues of heeding the law while on the road. This would allow them to realise how driving carefully could benefit both themselves and the people around them. Moreover, new cars could be built in such a way that they restrict the drivers’ ability to commit traffic offences like illegal speeding or turns. For instance, the car’s computer could automatically decrease its maximum speed in residential areas or near intersections. In conclusion, I think any idea that could increase road safety is worth trying, so while driving offences should be heavily punished, solutions like safety classes for new drivers and technologies that prevent offences are also necessary.
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drivers
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them is to have severe penalties for offending
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traffic
regulations, while others
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other
solutions may work better. I
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, although such punishments are helpful,
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other
measures should
be taken
alongside them.

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drivers
who
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ignore
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traffic
laws play a major role in
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many
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road
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accidents
.
For example
,
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some
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use
their mobile phones while
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driving
and do not focus on the
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road
, meaning they would definitely not be able to control their cars in time to avoid
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accidents
. If such
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drivers
know they
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risk
being imprisoned
or
heavily
fined, they will
probably
be motivated
to observe
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driving
regulations more
closely
.
Furthermore
,
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penalising
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driving
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offences
is the quickest solution since it can
be applied
immediately and
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drivers
will
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see
the consequences of their faults right away.

On the
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other
hand, there are various
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other
means of decreasing the number of
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traffic
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accidents
.
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Driving
license candidates could
be required
to sit courses aimed at educating them on the virtues of heeding the law while on the
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road
. This would
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allow
them to
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realise
how
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driving
carefully
could benefit both themselves and the
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people
around them.
Moreover
, new cars could
be built
in such a way that they restrict the
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drivers’
ability to commit
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traffic
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offences
like illegal speeding or turns.
For instance
, the car’s computer could
automatically
decrease its maximum speed in residential areas or near intersections.

In conclusion
, I
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think
any
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idea
that could increase
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road
safety is worth trying,
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so
while
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driving
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offences
should be
heavily
punished, solutions like safety classes for new
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drivers
and technologies that
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prevent
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offences
are
also
necessary.
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IELTS essay Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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