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Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion v.10

Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. 10
Traffic accidents have increased in recent days. It's a debatable issue nowadays that violators should be punished strictly with laws, rather than concealing them. This essay will discuss both the views and my perspective. On one side, some believe that strict punishments for traffic violators are the key factor to reduce traffic accidents. Like imposing Huge fines on them. By this there will be definite impact on the way of driving. Furthermore, bringing strict laws into action can have a major reason for reducing road accidents. For instance, Person who violated the rules in Australia has to pay a fine of $1500 and sometimes may be imprisoned for a span of 6 months. This has a major influence on traffic violators. Moreover there is a decline in accidents. Other side, some argue that other measures will have more effect in improving road safety. Measures like concealing them with higher officials. Advertising the impact of road accidents with celebrities also plays a major role in reducing accidents. Implementing more police patrols on highways. Apart from them maintaining good road signs and road indicators will help the vehicle drivers at night time. For example, Vehicles travelling at night times should be able to have signs so that anticipate their actions if there any road turn ahead. In conclusion, both the views have pros and cons. In my opinion, I support the idea of imposing strict traffic rules, which will help to reduce accidents in huge number, rather than counselling the traffic violators.
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violators
should
be punished
strictly
with laws,
rather
than concealing them. This essay will discuss both the views and my perspective.

On one side,
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believe that strict punishments for
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violators
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accidents
. Like imposing Huge fines on them. By this there will be
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impact on the way of driving.
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accidents
.
For instance
, Person who violated the
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rules
in Australia
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pay a fine of $1500 and
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for a span of 6 months. This has a major influence on
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Other side,
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argue that other measures will have more effect in improving
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safety. Measures like concealing them with higher officials. Advertising the impact of
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road
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accidents
with celebrities
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accidents
. Implementing more police patrols on highways. Apart from them maintaining
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signs and
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indicators will
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the vehicle drivers at
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night time
.
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night times
should be able to have signs
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that anticipate their actions if
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there any
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turn ahead.

In conclusion
, both the views have pros and cons. In my opinion, I support the
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idea
of imposing strict
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traffic
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rules
, which will
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to
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reduce
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accidents
in huge number,
rather
than counselling the
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traffic
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violators
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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