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Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v.18

Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v. 18
These days, we visualize large number of traffic accidents. These accidents sometimes ruin the complete family or may leave a person nearly dead or paralyzed for rest of the life. It is commonly believed by many that there should be strict punishments for traffic rule offenders while some other believe that there are many other effective measures that could supervise the road safety. In this essay, I will discuss both these views and present my own opinion. It is undeniable that despite of several warning messages and awareness programs, these traffic rule offenders do not follow the traffic laws. There should be hard punishment such as withholding their licence or few days of imprisonment for those who do not obey the traffic rules. Such punishments would be a lesson to others so that they do no imitate the such offences. Once the rule-breakers are punished badly by the law-enforcing agencies they would never try to repeat those offences. Hence, it will improve road safety to some extent. On the other side, some other precausive measures by the government could be an effective solution to mitigate road accidents. Firstly and fore-mostly, there should be better infrastructure in the form of well-maintained roads, fixed traffic light signals and proper sign boards. Along with that awareness programs that demonstrate the after-accident life experience of real road accident victims, the benefits of using safety gadgets and following road rules could work beneficially to improve road safety. In my opinion, we could not force anybody to abide by the rules, it mostly comes by self-consciousness and this could be brought through awareness programs instead of strict punishments. I believe that taking precausive actions such as well-constructed roads, well-defined traffic rules and better infrastructure would be much superior that deciding strict punishments for rule-breakers. To conclude, traffic rule offenders could be found everywhere around the globe. Taking strict action against them could be solution but not only. In my opinion, there are various other effective ways to control road accidents and improve road safety including awareness programs and well-designed infrastructure.
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accidents
. These
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accidents
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leave
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nearly
dead or paralyzed for rest of the life. It is
commonly
believed by
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many
that there should be
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strict
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punishments
for
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traffic
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rule
offenders while
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some
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other
believe that there are
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many
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other
effective measures that could supervise the
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road
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safety
. In this essay, I will discuss both these views and present my
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own
opinion.

It is undeniable that
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despite of
several warning messages and
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awareness
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programs
, these
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traffic
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rule
offenders do not follow the
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traffic
laws. There should be
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hard
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punishment
such as withholding their
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licence
or few days of imprisonment for those who do not obey the
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traffic
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rules
. Such
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punishments
would be a lesson to others
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so
that they do no imitate the such
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offences
.
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the
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rule
-breakers
are punished
badly
by the law-enforcing agencies they would never try to repeat those
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offences
.
Hence
, it will
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improve
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road
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safety
to
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some
extent.

On the
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other
side,
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some
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other
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precausive
measures by the
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government
could be an effective solution to mitigate
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road
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accidents
.
Firstly
and fore-
mostly
, there should be better infrastructure in the form of well-maintained
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roads
,
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fixed
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traffic
light signals and proper
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sign
boards. Along with that
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awareness
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programs
that demonstrate the after-accident life experience of real
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road
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accident
victims, the benefits of using
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safety
gadgets and following
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road
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rules
could work
beneficially
to
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improve
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road
safety.

In my opinion, we could not force anybody to abide by the
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rules
, it
mostly
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comes
by self-consciousness and this could
be brought
through
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awareness
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programs
instead
of
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strict
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punishments
. I believe that taking
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precausive
actions such
as well
-constructed
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roads
, well-defined
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traffic
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rules
and better infrastructure would be much superior that deciding
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strict
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punishments
for
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rule
-breakers.

To conclude
,
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traffic
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rule
offenders could
be found
everywhere around the globe. Taking
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strict
action against them could be solution
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but
not
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only
. In my opinion, there are various
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other
effective ways to control
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road
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accidents
and
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improve
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road
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safety
including
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awareness
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programs
and well-designed infrastructure.
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IELTS essay Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v. 18

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
344 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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