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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live Discuss both sides and give your opinion v.2

Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live 2
Some people say zoos are the place where wildlife animals can be protected and take care properly, while others argue that locking up animals’ freedom in the zoo is morally wrong. This essay will be discussed both sides of this issue, and then will give my own opinions on the matter. On the one hand, there are some reasons that people think the zoo is inhumane. To begin with, the zoo has limited the freedom of animals by imprisoning them instead of letting them travel freely in the forest and letting then living their natural life. Moreover, animals are not treated properly in the zoo. For example, some animals-training at the zoo is difficult to entertain just because they take money cut of them. Then, this can lead to stress and serious illness to animals, which cause reduce of their lifespan. The zoo is the solution proposed by some above reasons. On the other hand, the zoo is meant to protect the wildlife species to save the future generations of those animals. Initially, some countries’ zoos are unprofitable to do a wildlife rescue plan that sending many groups across the forest to look for endangered species and take them to the zoo to provide the appropriate nourishment. If the zoo is closed, the animals in the red list would be dead. Furthermore, zoo is also an education place where students are able to come here to research for their project and does not dangerous because of better security at the zoo. To sum up, some zoos have their own positive impacts on the animal species, personally, I think they need to improve the better protection and food for animals so that will not more harm than good.
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people
say zoos are the place where wildlife
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animals
can
be protected
and take care
properly
, while others argue that locking up
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animals’
freedom in the zoo is
morally
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wrong
. This essay will
be discussed
both sides of this issue, and then will give my
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own
opinions on the matter.

On the one hand, there are
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some
reasons that
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people
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think
the zoo is inhumane. To
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begin
with, the zoo has limited the freedom of
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animals
by imprisoning them
instead
of letting them travel
freely
in the forest and letting then living their natural life.
Moreover
,
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animals
are not treated
properly
in the zoo.
For example
,
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some
animals-training at the zoo is difficult to entertain
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just
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because
they take money
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cut
of them. Then, this can lead to
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stress
and serious illness to
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animals
, which cause
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reduce
of their lifespan. The zoo is the solution proposed by
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some
above reasons.

On the other hand
, the zoo
is meant
to protect the wildlife species to save the future generations of those
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animals
.
Initially
,
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some
countries’ zoos are unprofitable to do a wildlife rescue plan that sending
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many
groups across the forest to look for endangered species and take them to the zoo to provide the appropriate nourishment. If the zoo
is closed
, the
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animals
in the red list would be dead.
Furthermore
, zoo is
also
an education place where students are able to
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come
here to research for their project and does not
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dangerous
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because
of better security at the zoo.

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some
zoos have their
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own
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positive
impacts on the
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animal
species,
personally
, I
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think
they need to
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improve
the better protection and food for
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animals
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so
that will not more harm than
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good
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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