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Some people think that schools should teach students to understand about right wrong and good behaviour instead of this being only parents responsibility Do you agree or disagree with this statement v.1

Some people think that schools should teach students to understand about right wrong and good behaviour instead of this being only parents responsibility v. 1
School is a place where students learn both academic skill and moral values. Schools are responsible for pupil’s overall fundamental development. Therefore, I also agree with the statement that teacher should also teach their students to understand about right, wrong and good behaviour. The two places where children can grasp the maximum knowledge are home and school. Children basically learn about behaviour patterns and social interaction, but school provides tremendous knowledge in this regard. Also, education institution is a place where they spend a lot time with their teachers and mate. Therefore, the attitude and manner, which the young students see from their surrounding (form teacher and classmate), stimulus to them to behave in same manner. Consequently, spreading the atmosphere of honesty, decency, politeness and generosity across the school are overarching so that these etiquettes can be crammed into children to the brim. For instance, my uncle’s daughter is just studying 5th class, but she respects the elderly people. Since her mentors taught these qualities which she must inculcate in her. In addition to above, in modern epoch parents of young generation are so busy in earnings that they hardly give the time to their lover. Hence they expect from the institution that in addition to the academic knowledge their children are also taught the civic sense regarding friendly attitude, maintaining the decorum of places like gardens or historical places etc. Furthermore, the parents only are not proving to be effective because demeanour patterns are sometimes being followed wrongly in household. For example, children observe certain acts of their family like talking in a loud tone, spitting on roads, being late for work and so on. Resultantly, they too might pick all these things up. This is why behavioural studies should be handled by school teachers as well. In conclusion, i would say that a teacher would help imbibe ethical principal in children and also help correct any wrong ones that the child may have picked on. Therefore, schools along with other subjects also teach good behaviour.
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School
is a
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place
where students learn both academic
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skill
and moral values.
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Schools
are responsible for pupil’s
overall
fundamental development.
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, I
also
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agree
with the statement that
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teacher
should
also
teach their students to understand about right,
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wrong
and
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good
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behaviour
.

The two
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places
where
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children
can grasp the maximum knowledge are home and
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school
.
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Children
basically
learn about
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behaviour
patterns and social interaction,
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but
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school
provides tremendous knowledge in this regard.
Also
, education institution is a
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place
where they spend
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a lot time
with their
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teachers
and mate.
Therefore
, the attitude and manner, which the young students
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see
from their surrounding (form
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teacher
and classmate), stimulus to them to behave in same manner.
Consequently
, spreading the atmosphere of honesty, decency, politeness and generosity across the
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school
are overarching
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so
that these
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etiquettes can
be crammed
into
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children
to the brim.
For instance
, my uncle’s daughter is
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just
studying 5th
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class
,
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but
she respects the elderly
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people
.
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Since
her mentors taught these qualities which she
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must
inculcate in her.

In addition
to above, in modern epoch parents of young generation are
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so
busy in earnings that they hardly give the time to their lover.
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Hence
they
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expect
from the institution that
in addition
to the academic knowledge their
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children
are
also
taught the civic sense regarding friendly attitude, maintaining the decorum of
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places
like gardens or historical
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places
etc.
Furthermore
, the parents
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only
are not proving to be effective
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because
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demeanour
patterns are
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sometimes
being followed
wrongly
in household.
For example
,
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children
observe certain acts of their family like talking in a loud tone, spitting on roads, being late for work and
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so
on.
Resultantly
, they too might pick all these things up. This is why
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behavioural
studies should
be handled
by
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school
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teachers
as well
.

In conclusion
,
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i
would say that a
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teacher
would
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help
imbibe ethical principal in
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children
and
also
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help
correct any
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wrong
ones that the child may have picked on.
Therefore
,
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schools
along with other subjects
also
teach
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good
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behaviour
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that schools should teach students to understand about right wrong and good behaviour instead of this being only parents responsibility v. 1

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4 paragraphs
337 words
6.0
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