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Some people think that school uniforms are unnecessary and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

It is always argued by many that scholars should be able to wear whatever they want at school and uniforms should be banned. as far as I am concerned, pupils always want to wear highly unusual clothes at school, while others disagree with it. From one piont of view, there are still the proponents of dressing the same think that wearing unusual clothes reduce inequality and feeling of jealousy. Obviously, every family has their own standarts of living in all countries. Thus, there are some students whos wear very expenseve clothes, while others may wear very simply. It leads to apartheid among pupils, owitng to this children from poor families may be discouraged and they lose interest in life. Therefore, scholars should dress the same in all schools. From another perspective, forcing children to dress a certain way inhibits self expression. Which is a key aspect of childhood that later shapes personalities and views. This is because people express themselves through their appearence from a young age. Pressuring fresh minds into dressing like soldiers can create a robotic sort of approach to life, possibly making them unhappy in their future. For instance 2019 Psychology study on freedom of speech and expression assessed and compared induviduals that were forced to wear a uniform as kids and tose that were allowed to dress how they like. The result found that those who had freedom of choice were much more confident in their decision. Although they were only young at the time, giving kids the option greatly impacted their characters. In conclusion, despite the many arguments put forth about children being forced to wear a school uniform, I believe individuality prevails over school identity and children should be free to express themselves.
It is always argued by
many
that scholars should be able to
wear
whatever they want at
school
and uniforms should
be banned
.
as
far as I
am concerned
, pupils always want to
wear
highly
unusual clothes at
school
, while others disagree with it.

From one
piont
of view, there are
still
the proponents of dressing the same
think
that wearing unusual clothes
reduce
inequality and feeling of jealousy.
Obviously
, every family has their
own
standarts
of living in all countries.
Thus
, there are
some
students
whos
wear
very
expenseve
clothes, while others may
wear
very
simply
. It leads to apartheid among pupils,
owitng
to
this
children
from poor families may be
discouraged and
they lose interest in life.
Therefore
, scholars should dress the same in all schools.

From another perspective, forcing
children
to dress a certain way inhibits
self expression
. Which is a key aspect of childhood that later shapes personalities and views. This is
because
people
express themselves through their
appearence
from a young age. Pressuring fresh minds into dressing like soldiers can create a robotic sort of approach to life,
possibly
making them unhappy in their future.
For instance
2019 Psychology study on freedom of speech and expression assessed and compared
induviduals
that
were forced
to
wear
a uniform as kids and
tose
that were
allowed
to dress how they like. The result found that those who had freedom of choice were much more confident in their decision. Although they were
only
young at the time, giving kids the option
greatly
impacted their characters.

In conclusion
, despite the
many
arguments put forth about
children
being forced
to
wear
a
school
uniform, I believe individuality prevails over
school
identity and
children
should be free to express themselves.
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IELTS essay School uniforms should be abolished in all school.

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289 words
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