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In many parts of the world families were larger in the past because people had more children Do you think there were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a large family in the past Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examp v.1

In many parts of the world families were larger in the past because people had more children Do you think there were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a large family in the past 1
Some European schools impart practical skills to young students from the age of 11 or 13, with the aim of training them to secure employment in the future. However, a general academic curriculum also exists for the rest of the students who attend school for a more traditional learning. In my opinion, schools should combine academic education with practical skill learning through awareness workshops, career assessment tests and summer internship programmes, in order to prepare the students for the world of work. Firstly, a career assessment test should be conducted for the students wherein certain professions would be suggested based on their current abilities and aptitudes. As a result of which, awareness workshops highlighting a wide of range of professions (especially the jobs which the students may have matched with) should be organised by the schools. These workshops can then provide the students with an insight on how life would be if they choose a certain career path and the route to get there. A career assessment test proved of great help to me during my schooling as it revealed the best professional match (of an editor) with my existing skills and interests (reading and writing). Secondly, the schools should coordinate with companies or individual professionals to organise summer internship programmes for their students. These internships will not only serve as a platform that will develop the student’s practical skill sets, but also give them an opportunity to witness life in a certain professional field. Another benefit is that this programme will not interfere with the general academic education as it will take place during the summer vacation. During my younger years, my summer internship (back in 2011) with a publishing company had greatly helped me in making my decision towards pursuing higher education in the English language, in order to fulfil my dream of becoming an editor. To conclude, I do believe that schools should indeed prepare students for the world of work but not in isolation. Instead, they should impart a combination of academic learning with practical skill training in order to achieve a more holistic development of the student, through workshops, tests and internship opportunities.
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for a more traditional learning. In my opinion,
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should combine
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academic
education with
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practical
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skill
learning through awareness
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workshops
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career
assessment
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tests
and
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summer
internship
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for the world of work.

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, a
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career
assessment
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test
should
be conducted
for the
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students
wherein certain professions would
be suggested
based on their
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current
abilities and aptitudes.
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of which, awareness
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workshops
highlighting a wide of range of professions (
especially
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students
may have matched with) should be
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with an insight on how life would be if they choose a certain
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career
path and the route to
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assessment
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test
proved of great
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help
to me during my schooling as it revealed the best professional match (of an editor) with my existing
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skills
and interests (reading and writing).

Secondly
, the
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schools
should coordinate with
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companies
or individual professionals to
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summer
internship
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for their
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students
. These internships will not
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only
serve as a platform that will develop the
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also
give them an opportunity to witness life in a certain professional field. Another benefit is that this
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programme
will not interfere with the general
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academic
education as it will take place during the
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summer
vacation. During my younger years, my
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summer
internship (back in 2011) with a publishing
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company
had
greatly
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helped
me in making my decision towards pursuing higher education in the English language, in order to fulfil my dream of becoming an editor.

To conclude
, I do believe that
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students
for the world of work
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but
not in isolation.
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learning with
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skill
training in order to achieve a more holistic development of the
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student
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workshops
,
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tests
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IELTS essay In many parts of the world families were larger in the past because people had more children Do you think there were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a large family in the past 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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