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In today's world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot? v.3

In today's world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot? v. 3
Art and artists have always been respected from centuries. Even in this modern era, a greater emphasis has been given to artists across the globe. This essay will discuss why there is such a huge respect towards artists and explain the critical things that art can showcase about life which technology cannot. In many countries, artists are regarded as the greatest wealth a nation can possess. Moreover, they represent the actual culture and history of a place through the means of paintings, drawings and acts in the form of plays about the local life. For Example, a recent study on paintings by the students at Duke University identified that works of artists were the key source to identify the tradition of an old city in London. In Short, due to the enormous services done towards the society and retaining the culture, artists should be whole heartedly respected as they are pride of the nation. Firstly, art is a special skill where in artists represent the real life sequences in the form of real life paintings and songs. Secondly, art is also a medium to express your thoughts and emotions through various artistic works. For Instance, art played a vital role in the life of writers where in they could put their imagination into words, which led to many novels and stories. Overall, art brings in a lot of value to life which is not possible through science and technology. To conclude, art provides us with the way of life in the past and the rich history of country which is seemingly impossible by science and technology.
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from centuries. Even in this modern era, a greater emphasis has been
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given
to
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artists
across the globe. This essay will discuss why there is such a huge respect towards
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artists
and
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explain
the critical things that
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art
can showcase about
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life
which technology cannot.

In
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many
countries,
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artists
are regarded
as the greatest wealth a nation can possess.
Moreover
, they represent the actual culture and history of a place through the means of paintings, drawings and acts in the form of plays about the local
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life
.
For Example
, a recent study on paintings by the students at Duke University identified that works of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
artists
were the key source to identify the tradition of an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
city in London. In Short, due to the enormous services done towards the society and retaining the culture,
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artists
should be whole
heartedly
respected as they are pride of the nation.

Firstly
,
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art
is a special
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
where in
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artists
represent the real
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life
sequences in the form of real
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life
paintings and songs.
Secondly
,
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art
is
also
a medium to express your thoughts and emotions through various artistic works.
For Instance
,
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art
played a vital role in the
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life
of writers where in they could put their imagination into words, which led to
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many
novels and stories.
Overall
,
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art
brings in
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a lot of
value to
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life
which is not possible through science and technology.

To conclude
,
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art
provides us with the way of
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life
in the past and the rich history of country which is
seemingly
impossible by science and technology.
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21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In today's world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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