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Some people think that researching the past is a waste of time and money. We should instead focus on the issues if today's world. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that researching the past is a waste of time and money. We should instead focus on the issues if today's world. v. 1
In the last 50 years, the majority of people claim that investing money for protecting history or everything which is related to ancient events is useless because there are many crucial crises in the society and that should be solved instead. However, I firmly disagree there are two reasons as follows. First of all, it is clear fact that, spending funds in the historical part is not waste of money because the history of every nation is the symbol of that area with preserving cultural heritages and past events which show us how much we get value to our patriotic feelings. For example, every year, the government considers huge amount of money for storing infrastructure of museums to not destructed over time this function lead to youngsters get enough data from their ancestors and as a result history won't be disappearing. Further and even more importantly though, the experiences of the old generation are accurately vital. Older individuals pave the ways for coming generations by the way of doing trial and errors as a result, it will be highly simple for youth to discover the success ways. The case in point, unlike human life expectancy in the past, nowadays, we, witness one who has 100 or more years so that is is clear that how much scientific research is progressing so all of this breakthrough events is the root of the importance of ancient. In conclusion, it is not acceptable that investment in the past is time consuming it is an insurmountable fact that this old section is sensitive and vital for new generation lives as well as the community.
In the last 50 years, the majority of
people
claim that investing money for protecting history or everything which
is related
to ancient
events
is useless
because
there are
many
crucial crises in the society and that should
be solved
instead
.
However
, I
firmly
disagree there are two reasons as follows.

First of all
, it is
clear
fact that, spending funds in the historical part is not waste of money
because
the history of every nation is the symbol of that area with preserving cultural heritages and past
events
which
show
us how much we
get
value to our patriotic feelings.
For example
, every year, the
government
considers huge amount of money for storing infrastructure of museums to not destructed over time this function lead to youngsters
get
enough
data from their ancestors and
as a result
history won't be disappearing.

Further
and even more
importantly
though, the experiences of the
old
generation are
accurately
vital. Older individuals pave the ways for coming generations by the way of doing trial and errors
as a result
, it will be
highly
simple for youth to discover the success ways. The case in point, unlike human life expectancy in the past, nowadays, we, witness one who has 100 or more years
so
that
is is
clear
that how much scientific research is progressing
so
all of this breakthrough
events
is the root of the importance of ancient.

In conclusion
, it is not acceptable that investment in the past is
time consuming
it is an insurmountable fact that this
old
section is sensitive and vital for new generation
lives
as well
as the community.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that researching the past is a waste of time and money. We should instead focus on the issues if today's world. v. 1

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  American English
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270 words
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