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Some people think that real life skills like cooking, housekeeping and gardening should be included in the curriculum as compulsory subjects? Do you agree or disagree? Explain your opinion, using specific reasons and details. v.2

Some people think that real life skills like cooking, housekeeping and gardening should be included in the curriculum as compulsory subjects? Explain your opinion, using specific reasons and details. v. 2
In order to survive, cooking, housekeeping and gardening are the most essential part for every person’s life. Few people believe that these crucial real life skills are one of the most key part which must be included in regular syllabus as a mandatory subjects. This essay will provide detailed overview of my opinion whether I agree on the same or not and also showcase few valid examples to support my views. In my opinion, I agree that life lessons are necessary to support oneself during any emergency. Firstly, there are some educational organizations which accepts such subjects as obligatory students are bound to learn them just like other subjects. This may help them in future numerous ways. For example, Ramakrishna Mission is following the same concept since it was founded. According to this institution, having knowledge about these household activities provide them a different view. Secondly, these studies are not only provide an another view but also teach one how to manage regular domestic works along with work life. As an example, we often face various difficulties during work life. Mostly, people are unable to manage both lives together. In order to prioritize the work, we don’t get time for gardening or cooking or cleaning house. It is always recommended that one should keep up balance. Otherwise, we will not have time to cook. Our house also needs attention to get clean regular basis or weekly basis. Having a mandatory section for these subjects increase the awareness as well as time management capability from the very early days of one’s life. To summarized, common or regular homemaker job task is recommended to all educational institute to keep it as compulsory to let the youngsters how to manage all of them in even manner during busy life style.
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life
. Few
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people
believe that these crucial real
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life
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skills
are one of the most key part which
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must
be included
in
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regular
syllabus as a mandatory
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subjects
. This essay will provide detailed overview of my opinion whether I
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agree
on the same or not and
also
showcase few valid examples to support my views.

In my opinion, I
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agree
that
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life
lessons are necessary to support oneself during any emergency.
Firstly
, there are
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some
educational organizations which accepts such
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subjects
as obligatory students
are bound
to learn them
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just
like other
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subjects
. This may
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help
them in future numerous ways.
For example
, Ramakrishna Mission is following the same concept since it
was founded
. According to this institution, having knowledge about these household activities provide them a
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different
view.
Secondly
, these studies are not
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only
provide
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an another view
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but
also
teach one how to manage
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regular
domestic works along with
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work
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life
. As an example, we
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often
face various difficulties during
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work
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life
.
Mostly
,
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people
are unable to manage both
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lives
together. In order to prioritize the
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work
, we don’t
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get
time for gardening or cooking or cleaning
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house
.

It is always recommended that one should
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keep
up balance.
Otherwise
, we will not have time to cook. Our
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house
also
needs attention to
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get
clean
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regular
basis or weekly basis. Having a mandatory section for these
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subjects
increase the awareness
as well
as time management capability from the
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very
early days of one’s life.

To summarized, common or
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regular
homemaker job task
is recommended
to all educational institute to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
it as compulsory to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
the youngsters how to manage all of them in even manner during busy
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life
style.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that real life skills like cooking, housekeeping and gardening should be included in the curriculum as compulsory subjects? Explain your opinion, using specific reasons and details. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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